Night's Child

This is lovely, silence!     
      
Because I know you appreciate and want honest critique, I would offer the following:   
     
I dance barefoot in the dewy grass      
waiting, longing in the darkest night      
     
what if you substituted 'in the' with 'upon' in L1?  You would reduce the redundancy and expand the vocabulary.  I suggest 'upon' because it would add to the assonance of o and consonance of n, i.e. - upon/longing.    
     
Also, do you REALLY need that second determiner ( 'the' ) in the final line?  You're currently using five in S2 - the above suggestions would eliminate three.  

This. Yes. The entire piece has 7 instances of "the". Only 2 are vital.  

It is lovely!

Ahavati -

Thank you for the suggestions, and for adding this to your RL!  I completely agree and edited accordingly.  The flow is a lot smoother and between yours and Johnny's suggestions, the imagery/colors come through far clearer.

Thank you for the critique as well, and all blessings - Silence

Johnny,

Thank you for your critique as well. After editing this accordingly, I believe the only 2 instances of "the" that remain are the vital ones.

The fact that you and Ahavati took the time to read the piece and to critique in such a way that doesn't change the imagery is something I truly appreciate.

All Blessings - Silence

You're most welcome, Silence. Glad we could help. Best of luck in the comp. xo

You wove yourself perfectly into the night. You are the dawn also, it seems.
I want what you're drinking, lol. Fantastic arrangement here, seriously. ;-)

The intention was to be those few moments just before the first hint of dawn. Thank you so much - and I drink coffee, which I would gladly share! :D  

All Blessings,

Silence

Sweet Child of the Night, this is absolutely lovely…
I'm drinking in every word of this and enjoying it.

You, too, don't need a lot of words to make beautiful art.

<3

I'm in a peculiar place right now - to convey what is being given to me, but to also make sure it reads properly. There are times when what emerges is too choppy, not smoothed out enough, and other times where there are too many words, too much repetition.

It's all about that sweet golden mean.

Thank you, and all Blessings,

Silence <3

You've done a wonderful job painting your landscape, and who you are to us. Great writing, inechoingsilence!