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Mother Eternal
Life springs…
Through the trees and the leaves
Presenting beautiful kindred spirits for all to see
Thus embarking into a new world
Crafted by delicate hands
Mother Eternal cradles a child
Amid the layers of time
With a softness only nature can illustrate
Nurturing
Caring
Loving
Through the trees and the leaves
Presenting beautiful kindred spirits for all to see
Thus embarking into a new world
Crafted by delicate hands
Mother Eternal cradles a child
Amid the layers of time
With a softness only nature can illustrate
Nurturing
Caring
Loving
Published 10th Dec 2019
Author's Note
Re-Sculpturing, the art of driftwood
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10th Dec 2019 7:07am
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10th Dec 2019 9:18pm
The artist has such intricate detailed pieces it was difficult to pick one. I'm afraid I was at loss for words and yet your comment feel so true to the her art.
10th Dec 2019 8:19am
10th Dec 2019 9:31pm
10th Dec 2019 1:34pm
Lovely, Wally! You took something petrified and made it soft to the human heart.
You know me! I think you can really tighten it up by losing some of the determiners you got going on in there!
Through [the] trees and [the] leaves
Amid [the] layers of time
If you read these two lines without the determiners, you'll see they read just fine.
You know me! I think you can really tighten it up by losing some of the determiners you got going on in there!
Through [the] trees and [the] leaves
Amid [the] layers of time
If you read these two lines without the determiners, you'll see they read just fine.
10th Dec 2019 9:19pm
Def will work on it (once the voting is over).
I tend to get a little wordy sometimes.
Thank you Ahavati.
I tend to get a little wordy sometimes.
Thank you Ahavati.
10th Dec 2019 2:35pm
This benefits greatly from the your utilization of not only k consonance:
kindred, embarking, crafted, delicate, cradles, can, Caring
but also the choice of wording reinforcing the tree imagery:
kindred ( kindling ), embarking ( bark ).
Superb.
kindred, embarking, crafted, delicate, cradles, can, Caring
but also the choice of wording reinforcing the tree imagery:
kindred ( kindling ), embarking ( bark ).
Superb.
10th Dec 2019 9:23pm
Thank you Johnny. It was definately a different piece for me, rather than rhyme I was going for a different feel.
