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shingle
they only shine in the dark
they only shine for a second
they sizzle
they shimmer
they scorch
they turn to ash
and disperse evenly among the floorboards.
life goes on when it doesn't-
when it shouldn't.
i try not to watch.
they only shine for a second
they sizzle
they shimmer
they scorch
they turn to ash
and disperse evenly among the floorboards.
life goes on when it doesn't-
when it shouldn't.
i try not to watch.
Published 29th Dec 2011
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29th Dec 2011 6:04pm
It's, I dare say, one of your Best Poems to date!
the last stanza is stunning!!
the last stanza is stunning!!
Anonymous
29th Dec 2011 6:08pm
I agree with opheliac entirely. Reading list.
30th Dec 2011 4:59am
29th Dec 2011 7:14pm
I´m kind of repeating myself with comments on your poetry again so here it goes.
You are a teenager, but you write about daily life like an adult, and you have a grasp of life that teenagers shouldn´t have. Your meatphors are top notch, and your understanding of subtext would make chekov shit himself
You are a teenager, but you write about daily life like an adult, and you have a grasp of life that teenagers shouldn´t have. Your meatphors are top notch, and your understanding of subtext would make chekov shit himself
