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Tesla's Love Villianelle
Combusting, everything ignites
with parts and static everywhere;
I’m terribly, in love tonight.
The scent of lightning sharp tonight;
twinned tesla coils and acrid air,
combusting everything, ignites.
Capacitors, resistance, flight
electrifying circuits there
so terribly with love tonight.
A sparking gap positioned right,
charges met within a stare;
combustion; everything ignites,
Magnetism, bolts of light
with oscillations, impulse squared,
burn terribly, in love tonight.
Voltage resonates, despite
polarities of this affair,
combust and everything ignites,
I’m terribly in love tonight.
with parts and static everywhere;
I’m terribly, in love tonight.
The scent of lightning sharp tonight;
twinned tesla coils and acrid air,
combusting everything, ignites.
Capacitors, resistance, flight
electrifying circuits there
so terribly with love tonight.
A sparking gap positioned right,
charges met within a stare;
combustion; everything ignites,
Magnetism, bolts of light
with oscillations, impulse squared,
burn terribly, in love tonight.
Voltage resonates, despite
polarities of this affair,
combust and everything ignites,
I’m terribly in love tonight.
Published 7th Dec 2019
| Edited 17th Apr 2020
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8th Dec 2019 00:15am
8th Dec 2019 00:31am
cleverly twisted, a more interesting villanelle than many i've read. in this case, the poem comes through more strongly than the parameters, so that's great. a villanelle fit for today :D
i think you could lose the 'the' in one line and add the suffix, leaving you with 'electrifying circuits there' without losing anything from intent and meaning.
i think you could lose the 'the' in one line and add the suffix, leaving you with 'electrifying circuits there' without losing anything from intent and meaning.
8th Dec 2019 3:03am
Thank you so much for taking a look. I agree with your edit,
I put this up quickly and am very grateful for your attention here.
Cheers!
I put this up quickly and am very grateful for your attention here.
Cheers!
8th Dec 2019 1:51am
I love the subtle twists on L3 of each stanza! Punctuation adds an entirely new dimension. This was exceptionally clever and well executed.
8th Dec 2019 3:06am
You are always kind and reveal things to me with your comments
about my writing, Thank you so much!
about my writing, Thank you so much!
8th Dec 2019 3:04am
with your poem, I am too..
lovely complacent which is felt within each line,
also the content is viable (seed, if you will) of guidance
lovely complacent which is felt within each line,
also the content is viable (seed, if you will) of guidance
Thank you for interesting thoughts about this. Tesla coils have always held a great fasination for me.
