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YOPJ - Count Your Blessings
Count your blessings. In this context today they are our children. Some are blessings in disguise!
If they amount to zero, pat yourself on the back and then give yourself a hug for me, because I both pity and envy you! You don't want to walk in my shoes, nor I in yours. Besides, when it comes to your shoes, my feet are too small. Think I have the glory? It may look like a fantasy come true, but my shoes give me blisters. Yours look comfy, even if you don't want to brag.
I try to count my blessings... but they get wanderlust and run off before 18.
Just when you fall in love with their sweet reality you realize that they will never stay. They never let you forget. If they don't say it, every day their feet get closer to the door.
If they amount to zero, pat yourself on the back and then give yourself a hug for me, because I both pity and envy you! You don't want to walk in my shoes, nor I in yours. Besides, when it comes to your shoes, my feet are too small. Think I have the glory? It may look like a fantasy come true, but my shoes give me blisters. Yours look comfy, even if you don't want to brag.
I try to count my blessings... but they get wanderlust and run off before 18.
Just when you fall in love with their sweet reality you realize that they will never stay. They never let you forget. If they don't say it, every day their feet get closer to the door.
Published 6th Dec 2019
| Edited 22nd Dec 2019
Author's Note
❤️ We don't have babies for ourselves, we do it for the world. ❤️
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7th Dec 2019 7:06am
Good advice to make the most of your children - blessings - when they are at home, In time they may bring you others to love in the form of {hopefully good and loving} children-in-law and grandchildren.
7th Dec 2019 6:53pm
7th Dec 2019 3:40pm
Yep; children are not ours, but the Universe's. We are mere conduits for Life.
A few things:
Firstly,
"Keep your shoes. My feet are too small. My shoes give me blisters. Yours look comfy, even if you don't want to brag."
This sticks out like a sore thumb. Was someone offering you shoes? It's a good sentiment, but it appeared to come out of left field.
Secondly,
"I try to count my blessings... but they get wanderlust and run off before 18."
I would define you're referring to your children here. And example would be:
I try to count my blessings... [ all ten of them ] but[,]they get wanderlust and run off before [ their 18th birthday ].
Lastly, I would add a commas and make a few adjustments as such:
Just when you fall in love with their sweet reality[ , ] you realize that they will never stay. They never let you forget ( [ even ] if they don't say it )[ ; ] every day their feet get closer to the door.
It's a lovely and true sentiment, Jess. That empty nest is painful and yet, a sign of success.
A few things:
Firstly,
"Keep your shoes. My feet are too small. My shoes give me blisters. Yours look comfy, even if you don't want to brag."
This sticks out like a sore thumb. Was someone offering you shoes? It's a good sentiment, but it appeared to come out of left field.
Secondly,
"I try to count my blessings... but they get wanderlust and run off before 18."
I would define you're referring to your children here. And example would be:
I try to count my blessings... [ all ten of them ] but[,]they get wanderlust and run off before [ their 18th birthday ].
Lastly, I would add a commas and make a few adjustments as such:
Just when you fall in love with their sweet reality[ , ] you realize that they will never stay. They never let you forget ( [ even ] if they don't say it )[ ; ] every day their feet get closer to the door.
It's a lovely and true sentiment, Jess. That empty nest is painful and yet, a sign of success.
7th Dec 2019 6:12pm
Really good advice. I was trying to be funny the wrong way... again. I didn't drop enough info! Personally, I think, if jokes don't bomb here and there you aren't living yet.
Semicolons to come!
Semicolons to come!
