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Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
[b][b]If only we could fly like
those that tweet or hoot
without aid of jet or
parachute
For I sure don't like
wings that roar
just so they can take off
and soar
Ah, to fly without petrol, diesel
or fuel
Oh, to halt that taloned midair
duel *[b]
Birds they don't pollute
the air
nor need they any airline
fare
So if only I too could rise
and glide
and let the wind be my
sole guide
I'd be happy to fly all the
way to 'em' faraway stars
if I was assured I'd risk
no charring scars.
Flying without aviation
formalities
I could be sightseeing
many more cities
Ah I so wish to fly just
like a jay or jackdaw
Then I'd fly across all and
every border
For I'd know nor follow
no man-made law![/b]
those that tweet or hoot
without aid of jet or
parachute
For I sure don't like
wings that roar
just so they can take off
and soar
Ah, to fly without petrol, diesel
or fuel
Oh, to halt that taloned midair
duel *[b]
Birds they don't pollute
the air
nor need they any airline
fare
So if only I too could rise
and glide
and let the wind be my
sole guide
I'd be happy to fly all the
way to 'em' faraway stars
if I was assured I'd risk
no charring scars.
Flying without aviation
formalities
I could be sightseeing
many more cities
Ah I so wish to fly just
like a jay or jackdaw
Then I'd fly across all and
every border
For I'd know nor follow
no man-made law![/b]
Written by
Zaynab_kamoonpury
Published 27th Nov 2019
| Edited 29th Nov 2019
Author's Note
*I've watched eagles fighting in midair talons locked an all.
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Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 1:52pm
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27th Nov 2019 2:02pm
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27th Nov 2019 2:04pm
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 3:35pm
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27th Nov 2019 4:38pm
Yeahh you got it, perhaps the freedom of flying like birds would be made possible in heaven, warm thanks for nice comment.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 4:37pm
The sense of flight would lead humans to at least try all sorts of variances!
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 4:53pm
Yeah the sense and the real, flight like birds would be so much fun and better than airplane flight ah. Maybe in heaven. Thanks so much for your thoughts on this.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 5:07pm
This my friend is beautiful, in its construction and its message - I am glad you wrote this this way as the message is clear. The world is in hurt but nothing seems to change. I wish we had the ability to fly away like birds, I would surely do so.
excellent ink that needs no changes :-))))))))))))
excellent ink that needs no changes :-))))))))))))
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 5:21pm
Yes this world has a lot of hurt. It would be nice to fly like birds than encaged in airplanes.
Thanks soo much friend for a great lofty comment!
Thanks soo much friend for a great lofty comment!
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
27th Nov 2019 10:31pm
The Treasure Of Those Feathered
Given In These Moments Of Forever
Measures Of Movement And Pleasure
Rising To Sky Diving Heaven To Nether
Well spoken , my friend...the Winged Ones show us much...
We say , in the ancient way , from Eagle to Hummingbird...;)
Given In These Moments Of Forever
Measures Of Movement And Pleasure
Rising To Sky Diving Heaven To Nether
Well spoken , my friend...the Winged Ones show us much...
We say , in the ancient way , from Eagle to Hummingbird...;)
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
28th Nov 2019 4:32am
Wow thanks so very much for such an interesting comment, for the great great amazing poem too. Cheers!
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27th Nov 2019 11:29pm
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28th Nov 2019 4:33am
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28th Nov 2019 8:23am
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
28th Nov 2019 9:56am
But of course you can fly ... Just close your eyes ... Nice write ... Bless and love ...
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
28th Nov 2019 11:21am
Yeahh sure we both can, we all can, as u put it imaginatively... I do daydream of flying like a birdie... Thanks soo much for comment!
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
28th Nov 2019 11:24am
Why yes thanks soo much for a lofty great comment poet!! Yes each of God's creation has been given sth the other one doesn't have, wow you inspired another poem being in ma mind now. I'm smiling that you acknowledged God, nice to meet yah, will chk out yours as well.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
28th Nov 2019 9:06pm
Hi there, thanks for your positive comments on my Festive poem. I enjoyed your poem, birds are some of my favourite animals, if only we could sprout wings of our own and join them.
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Yayy wow I like how you said that, I daydream of bird like flight, I'm glad to know birds are your fav creatures, coz I'm an ardent birdlover. Thanks soo much for your nice comment, would like to hear from you and read you whenever I come.
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29th Nov 2019 4:41am
Yeah, thanks for telling me what touched you as noteworthy. Thanks so much for your review.
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29th Nov 2019 4:46am
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29th Nov 2019 4:51am
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
Would be the ultimate environmentally friendly freedom to be able to fly as the birds do - agree entirely with you.
Yes, the sound of jet engines starting can be off putting to some and would not inspire those trying a plane journey after a lifetime with fear of flying.
The title reminds me of a verse from a parody of the spiritual 'Ain't gonna grieve my Lord no more':
You can never go to Heaven
in a jumbo jet
'cause the Lord ain't built
no runways yet!
Yes, the sound of jet engines starting can be off putting to some and would not inspire those trying a plane journey after a lifetime with fear of flying.
The title reminds me of a verse from a parody of the spiritual 'Ain't gonna grieve my Lord no more':
You can never go to Heaven
in a jumbo jet
'cause the Lord ain't built
no runways yet!
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29th Nov 2019 10:12am
Im super glad you agree ...you added your great points wow yayy.!
And the verse is amusing, God's invisible runways exist though lol.
Thanks soo much for comment.
And the verse is amusing, God's invisible runways exist though lol.
Thanks soo much for comment.
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
29th Nov 2019 2:09pm
Why yes you grasped well the wish for bird like freedom flying style in your own fine words. Thanks soo much for comment.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
29th Nov 2019 6:05pm
My 12 yo had a special moment reading this together! 💜
Thank you for sharing!
E.W.
Thank you for sharing!
E.W.
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29th Nov 2019 7:12pm
Aw warmest thanks for the comment and sharing my poem, your kid must be bright to like and read poetry with you. Take care,
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
30th Nov 2019 1:11am
I sometimes dream about flying. If only it were possible...
Nicely written, Zaynab.
Nicely written, Zaynab.
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
30th Nov 2019 4:24am
Yeah I dream and daydream of bird like flight. Hopefully in heaven it shall be enabled. Warm thanks for comment...☺️🌺
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30th Nov 2019 4:08am
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30th Nov 2019 4:26am
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12th Dec 2019 11:38am
Maybe the blimp will make a comeback, slower but it will get you there. Men has become to accustom with speed in everything. Faster by land, air, and sea. We will sacrifice life to get there one hour earlier. If we have to fly through several flocks of birds, speed through several schools of fish so be it. Sometime slower is better all living things live. Tight piece
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13th Dec 2019 5:17am
Thanks so much for your interesting thoughts on my poem. Yeah I'm not for faster. Slow is good and healthier if you have to walk or even run than drive. I wish for bird like flight, a fantasy dream. Maybe in the hereafter it would be enabled, I hope.
Ok best wishes,
Ok best wishes,
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
29th Dec 2019 10:11pm
I really enjoyed this little poem. I am a birdwatcher, and we jokingly call planes 'gas hawks'
I live close to an air force base, so planes fly over all of the time. It puts a real damper on the whole 'natural' experience. Human-invented flight will never be as seamless, clean, or beautiful as natural flight...
Thanks for sharing this, Zaynab. I really enjoyed it!
,
Best wishes,
-Newb
I live close to an air force base, so planes fly over all of the time. It puts a real damper on the whole 'natural' experience. Human-invented flight will never be as seamless, clean, or beautiful as natural flight...
Thanks for sharing this, Zaynab. I really enjoyed it!
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Best wishes,
-Newb
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Re: Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
29th Dec 2019 10:18pm
Hey wow you really grasped the intent and message so much more intelligently, smartly wirh eco friendly realisation.! Gas Hawks they are, clever that! Nice to know you are a birdwatcher, I'm an ardent birdlover. Thanks soo much for comment, wonder if I have read yours, going to check yours out.
Happy hols!
Happy hols!
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21st Feb 2020 6:19pm
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24th Feb 2020 11:05am
I'm glad it is, it isn't louder than the airplanes droning though neh lol. Thanks soo much for comment.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
26th Feb 2020 5:05am
This is a beautiful dream, only possible in a dream and inspired by dreams, even more since we need to be greener, as the birds are. I just heard that the population of songbirds is diminishing because of pollution, or they don't know completely why, maybe we fly more than they do..
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30th Apr 2020 9:15am
Warm thanks for your fine thoughts on this poem, yeah human pollution kills much. Yeah flying like birds in dreams and in the afterlife hopefully. Take care.
Re. Jumbo jets versus jackdaws and jays
30th Apr 2020 10:14pm
Your joy in imagining what it would be like to fly like a bird is happiness indeed. Just envisioning such a means of travel brings a kind of freedom. Long ago I had a recurring dream of flying higher and higher all the way to the moon.
John
John
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