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Salt
I remember you as the
hot wind of a beach town
downtown
our favorite dive bar
put lights up for
Halloween
you made me dance for tickets
we never won
and like the excitement of a new invention
your brain was always reeling;
fish hooks and guts all over
and you
on the pier catching all of them;
free beer in hand
I remember you being good
at everything
and I complained;
discreetly
adoring cigars on your breath;
watching your lips charm me,
always anticipating your mouth
I miss sharing our salted air
and you miscalculating
the cold of the night;
I loved you so much I
drank your wine anyway
on a blacked-out shore,
freezing
and laughing at
your idea of romance
hot wind of a beach town
downtown
our favorite dive bar
put lights up for
Halloween
you made me dance for tickets
we never won
and like the excitement of a new invention
your brain was always reeling;
fish hooks and guts all over
and you
on the pier catching all of them;
free beer in hand
I remember you being good
at everything
and I complained;
discreetly
adoring cigars on your breath;
watching your lips charm me,
always anticipating your mouth
I miss sharing our salted air
and you miscalculating
the cold of the night;
I loved you so much I
drank your wine anyway
on a blacked-out shore,
freezing
and laughing at
your idea of romance
Published 27th Nov 2019
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27th Nov 2019 3:49am
Hullo and welcome
found this remarkable poetry. really liked the feelings inter-weaved. the intimacy, the honesty, the imagary. and liked the fresh turn of phrase you command throughout
good stuff
found this remarkable poetry. really liked the feelings inter-weaved. the intimacy, the honesty, the imagary. and liked the fresh turn of phrase you command throughout
good stuff
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27th Nov 2019 3:59am
27th Nov 2019 3:59am
27th Nov 2019 4:05am
27th Nov 2019 5:48am
Yet another deeply personal poem translated into a reverie for every reader. I so envy your talent!
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27th Nov 2019 6:16am
27th Nov 2019 6:01am
I enjoyed the deep emotion but it also made me said because it sounds like a relationship that didn’t quite make it, like Simon and Garfunkel’s “April Come She Will”.
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27th Nov 2019 6:17am
27th Nov 2019 6:23am
27th Nov 2019 2:34pm
Awesome poetic recollections, romantic and elegant how you express in eloquent description wow. Kudos.
Pls pleez do review/ comment/ write your thoughts under my newest poem too.
Pls pleez do review/ comment/ write your thoughts under my newest poem too.
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27th Nov 2019 3:05pm
Thank god for you is all I can say.
Keen, detailed observation wrapped in a huge bow of description. Eloquently packaged.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
Keen, detailed observation wrapped in a huge bow of description. Eloquently packaged.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
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27th Nov 2019 5:43pm
27th Nov 2019 8:27pm
Fantastic recap of a relationship! I loved the absolute imagery, so relatable in this.
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27th Nov 2019 9:11pm
