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Cooking Up Ancient Spells In My Modern Kitchen
down the hatch
straight from
the oven
hot
hot
hotttt
just like
Poindexter’s folly;
I’m trying to plot
my escape,
and this is
the cheapest ticket
money can buy
half an hour,
forty-five minutes
pass me by
I am Lazarus
waiting for his savior;
come forth,
raise me from the dead,
cure this dread
sinking into bones
long gone dusty;
replaced with jelly,
my guts, floppy mush
where iron
used to envelop,
protect and serve ~
swine;
it’s what’s for dinner
unless you’ll permit
me to devour you
instead
oh baby
you,
most definitely
have what I need,
you
summoned by
my melancholy magic,
distract me
with your
skin-humming,
liquid heat;
spread throughout
these useless limbs,
the ones that
used to run,
proud and strong
materialize,
jog their memory,
activate dormant muscles,
wrapping my thighs
around
your slender hips;
re-animate this lagging
libido,
give me everything
even if for a moment;
lend me
your soul-scorching
selfish ideas
and let me ruminate,
hands lost
down my flannel
pajama pants;
not that I need
their help,
I’m coming
for you
with or without
my own permission;
it’s the one side effect
of nature’s bounty,
~the medicinal green~
that I can readily
embrace
hair fanned on pillows,
head in the clouds,
mouth falling open
in wordless whimpers;
synapses firing,
dashboard aglow,
this rocket’s building
momentum
lingering on the launch pad,
hiding
under satiny-soft sheets
caressing my skin;
an impatient lover,
reaching for orbit
before I’ve even
left the ground
letting go,
I’m a satellite
circling
the atmosphere
of your electronic
universe;
we, these two
planetary anomalies,
carefully avoiding
a direct collision
a No One to you,
an object of
minor affection,
aloof and hiding
from my lunar landscape,
vacating the room
whenever we get
close to real;
your need shines-
so tangible a thing,
it scares
the shit out of you
but it just fuels
the boosters
for my
hedonistic ascent;
your unwillingness
to relent
has me revved
past
my limit
but that won’t
break this spell,
no
not this time;
give me
all you’ve got,
I’m taking it,
anyway
your face floats
on herbed vapor
close enough
to mine,
you need only
to inch
a little closer,
let me taste your
lips
finally
send me up,
I’m already high;
take my hand,
dominate my mind
first,
prove to me
there’s higher
yet to go
Published 24th Nov 2019
| Edited 25th Nov 2019
Author's Note
Written for an erotica competition. Listening to Meg Myers “Desire” for reference.
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I'll have whatever she's having! LOL!
Well done, Luna! I believe it's time to take your protein pill and put your helmet on!
Well done, Luna! I believe it's time to take your protein pill and put your helmet on!
24th Nov 2019 7:57pm
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24th Nov 2019 9:09pm
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24th Nov 2019 9:50pm
Thank you, Sky_dancer - getting sick was never part of the plan, but I’m glad my imagination still works well 💜.
24th Nov 2019 9:33pm
* fans off Ahavati *
Whoo! I don't want to dampen the mood with too much analysis! Just a few suggestions.
You can remove the initial 4 lines since it immediately repeats the title.
"caressing my skin
like an impatient lover,"
There are 3 instances of "like" - this will do away with one.
"caressing my skin -
an impatient lover,"
"your need shines
like a tangible thing;
and it scares
the shit out of you,"
This will remove another.
"your need is a thing shining
so tangible it scares
the shit out of you,"
Whoo! I don't want to dampen the mood with too much analysis! Just a few suggestions.
You can remove the initial 4 lines since it immediately repeats the title.
"caressing my skin
like an impatient lover,"
There are 3 instances of "like" - this will do away with one.
"caressing my skin -
an impatient lover,"
"your need shines
like a tangible thing;
and it scares
the shit out of you,"
This will remove another.
"your need is a thing shining
so tangible it scares
the shit out of you,"
24th Nov 2019 9:36pm
Perfect, thank you! I implemented the changes - the flow is much smoother now 💜.
24th Nov 2019 9:36pm
24th Nov 2019 9:52pm
24th Nov 2019 10:24pm
26th Nov 2019 7:54am
Dear L,
I need a cigarette!
Elegant erotica. Who’d of thunk it could be done so well? Good luck in the comp. It’s a sure win! Excellent write my friend! H🌷
I need a cigarette!
Elegant erotica. Who’d of thunk it could be done so well? Good luck in the comp. It’s a sure win! Excellent write my friend! H🌷
26th Nov 2019 12:55pm
I definitely felt like I needed one after writing it 😅.
Thank you for your kind words, I appreciate them 💜
Thank you for your kind words, I appreciate them 💜
28th Nov 2019 5:08pm
Wow sensational and too awesome it's stunning. I ESP admired the satiny reaching into orbit before you stanza for its brilliant creative expression and also I could relate to that, my hubby always reaches mountain top first always lol, I hope this is about you and a guy.
Your muse is impressively sassy. Kudos.
pls pleez do comment/ review/ write your thoughts on my newest poem too.
Your muse is impressively sassy. Kudos.
pls pleez do comment/ review/ write your thoughts on my newest poem too.
9th Jan 2020 2:37am
Great song! Glad you plugged Meg cool backdrop to write a response with.
As for the poem... I can relate to the silent haunting of core wounds forcing a distant orbit. My love and I suffer a torrid torment of insecurity. Our ghosts won't leave us alone. But the fire for each other is hot, hot, hot.
Now I gotta go listen to "house on fire," by Sia.
As for the poem... I can relate to the silent haunting of core wounds forcing a distant orbit. My love and I suffer a torrid torment of insecurity. Our ghosts won't leave us alone. But the fire for each other is hot, hot, hot.
Now I gotta go listen to "house on fire," by Sia.
9th May 2021 8:48pm
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