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revelations
i said i loved you but i lied
you did not know that’s why i cried
by modest words disqualified
my iceberg base i tried to hide
my lyric lines were filled with vain profusions
i dared not bare my heart’s true revelations
i tried to kiss you but your pride
would not my forceful whims abide
too soon for strange lips to collide
or hearts so fragile to confide
and when i told you of my predilection
you said too soon for such blunt revelations
my genesis of hope resides
a thorn on eden’s mountainside
how soon might i be justified
by faith that cannot be denied
you said one day despite my taut confusion
you would to me bring sweeter revelations
i said i loved you but i lied
love serves not where pale words preside
but dwells—if truth be amplified—
in paradise where angels bide
from genesis through all life’s generations
love’s exodus seeks heaven’s revelations
© Copyright 2019 November 03
♫
you did not know that’s why i cried
by modest words disqualified
my iceberg base i tried to hide
my lyric lines were filled with vain profusions
i dared not bare my heart’s true revelations
i tried to kiss you but your pride
would not my forceful whims abide
too soon for strange lips to collide
or hearts so fragile to confide
and when i told you of my predilection
you said too soon for such blunt revelations
my genesis of hope resides
a thorn on eden’s mountainside
how soon might i be justified
by faith that cannot be denied
you said one day despite my taut confusion
you would to me bring sweeter revelations
i said i loved you but i lied
love serves not where pale words preside
but dwells—if truth be amplified—
in paradise where angels bide
from genesis through all life’s generations
love’s exodus seeks heaven’s revelations
© Copyright 2019 November 03
♫
Published 4th Nov 2019
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12th Nov 2019 8:02am
"my genesis of hope resides
a thorn on eden’s mountainside
how soon might i be justified
by faith that cannot be denied
you said one day despite my taut confusion
you would to me bring sweeter revelations"
Not giving up hope
when it looks bleak
and the twilight
a bringer of loss
and dreams yet unfold
waiting for the love
i believe will be all
i will ever need
A great masterpiece again, from the master of writes. Learnt a whole new way of writing on some things from this.
Graceful
a thorn on eden’s mountainside
how soon might i be justified
by faith that cannot be denied
you said one day despite my taut confusion
you would to me bring sweeter revelations"
Not giving up hope
when it looks bleak
and the twilight
a bringer of loss
and dreams yet unfold
waiting for the love
i believe will be all
i will ever need
A great masterpiece again, from the master of writes. Learnt a whole new way of writing on some things from this.
Graceful
Thank you, dear Graceful, for understanding and responding so positively to this write.
I collect "poetry bits" from simple words uttered by passersby or family and friends in conversation. It might be a word or phrase from the Bible, or just a turn of events.
I am most delighted that you should get new ideas from my poetry. That's the way DU poets bounce off each other so the whole tribe can improve. Moreover, you are a super protegé with whom I am more than happy to work and to inspire.
Thanks for the RL hosting.
Sincerely
cab
I collect "poetry bits" from simple words uttered by passersby or family and friends in conversation. It might be a word or phrase from the Bible, or just a turn of events.
I am most delighted that you should get new ideas from my poetry. That's the way DU poets bounce off each other so the whole tribe can improve. Moreover, you are a super protegé with whom I am more than happy to work and to inspire.
Thanks for the RL hosting.
Sincerely
cab
8th Dec 2019 6:06pm
I nominated this spill
for the comp
Poem of the Month December, 2019
Hope You don't mind
: )
for the comp
Poem of the Month December, 2019
Hope You don't mind
: )
Wow, Tallen Brother!
Thank you. I certainly do not mind. Rather, I am deeply touched because I often do not see myself in such grand company as the usual nominees.
Thanks for wowing this with an RL.
God bless you, Brother.
Sincerely
cab
Thank you. I certainly do not mind. Rather, I am deeply touched because I often do not see myself in such grand company as the usual nominees.
Thanks for wowing this with an RL.
God bless you, Brother.
Sincerely
cab
8th Dec 2019 8:02pm
You and Your ink
should be featured in this revolving comp
on a regular basis.
IMHO
because You not only create
but continue to think outside the poetic box
'while adhering to Your moral, ethical and religious values and
while i disagree on many intellectual thoughts on religion,
You and me, Brother,
are spot on
on many spiritual and heart (kindness) issues.
should be featured in this revolving comp
on a regular basis.
IMHO
because You not only create
but continue to think outside the poetic box
'while adhering to Your moral, ethical and religious values and
while i disagree on many intellectual thoughts on religion,
You and me, Brother,
are spot on
on many spiritual and heart (kindness) issues.
8th Dec 2019 8:25pm
Thank you, Tallen.
You know I mostly just write and post. I have no idea whether anyone will read my poems but when someone does, I am gratified to share my expressive potential, especially if I can lift someone's spirits.
You encourage me significantly. This I appreciate beyond what you might readily realise. Thank you.
My spiritual perspective is based solely on the Holy Bible. Neither will I add to, or subtract from, it (see Deut. 12:32 and Rev. 22:18, 19), in accordance with God's warning to those who would do so.
YOUR heart is pure gold, Tallen; you are faith in action. Make certain that that faith comes from the solid base of the Word of God. While faith without works is van (James 2:20), works cannot save anyone (Eph. 2:8, 9).
Yours sincerely
You know I mostly just write and post. I have no idea whether anyone will read my poems but when someone does, I am gratified to share my expressive potential, especially if I can lift someone's spirits.
You encourage me significantly. This I appreciate beyond what you might readily realise. Thank you.
My spiritual perspective is based solely on the Holy Bible. Neither will I add to, or subtract from, it (see Deut. 12:32 and Rev. 22:18, 19), in accordance with God's warning to those who would do so.
YOUR heart is pure gold, Tallen; you are faith in action. Make certain that that faith comes from the solid base of the Word of God. While faith without works is van (James 2:20), works cannot save anyone (Eph. 2:8, 9).
Yours sincerely
