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With mirth and laughter let old wrinkles come
I remember the bounce
of a bus ride into Liverpool
and a rolling ferry that made me so sick
I had to sit on his knee.
My small fingers ploughed the fields
on his potato sack face
as he kept a weather eye on the Mersey
and swamped me with his huge farm-hand hands.
I love you grandad I said, touching his cheek
beneath a gaze that drifts towards an ocean.
and there it was,
a smile that fitted perfectly into
every furrow on his face.
of a bus ride into Liverpool
and a rolling ferry that made me so sick
I had to sit on his knee.
My small fingers ploughed the fields
on his potato sack face
as he kept a weather eye on the Mersey
and swamped me with his huge farm-hand hands.
I love you grandad I said, touching his cheek
beneath a gaze that drifts towards an ocean.
and there it was,
a smile that fitted perfectly into
every furrow on his face.
Published 30th Oct 2019
Author's Note
Fond memories of my grandad
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30th Oct 2019 8:09pm
Time flies so fast and memories like this are priceless. Really enjoyed reading this offering, RL. it conjured my own nostalgia.
2nd Nov 2019 00:12am
Very pleased to read it works that way and yes so fast, in some respect its good that I cant remember what I had for lunch, when memories like his will never leave me.
this may be my favourite so far
i read you KNOWING i'm going to be rewarded for it, the journey, the changes. i was small, my fingers in those furrows. but best of all my own real-life-this-side-of-the-keyboard face lit up as if flooded by sunshine as i reached the payoff here in these lines:
and there it was,
a smile that fitted perfectly into
every furrow on his face.
and then, unexpectedly, wet eyes! wonderful reading, thankyou.
i read you KNOWING i'm going to be rewarded for it, the journey, the changes. i was small, my fingers in those furrows. but best of all my own real-life-this-side-of-the-keyboard face lit up as if flooded by sunshine as i reached the payoff here in these lines:
and there it was,
a smile that fitted perfectly into
every furrow on his face.
and then, unexpectedly, wet eyes! wonderful reading, thankyou.
2nd Nov 2019 00:17am
Butter you are very kind and its so wonderful to know that something I wrote can come across like that, deep gratitude for you honest and open feedback, now look im crying thinking about you filling up. Thank you
31st Oct 2019 7:31pm
My friend Maegan lost her gran the other day and has been very distraught. The details of this are so endearing. <3
2nd Nov 2019 00:21am
I so sorry to hear that Daniel, I think we very often have a very deep bond with grandma because they give us the time they couldn't give there children, its a very special gift.
1st Nov 2019 5:36pm
Grand-parents can play such an anchoring role in our lives - captured beautifully.
2nd Nov 2019 00:24am
Thank you Josh and yes I was lucky to have both sets of GP's for many years, unfortunately I havent made GP status yet but you never know.
