Self-awareness

Pride, love, power!!  Great message in a great poem!

Thank you, I wanted to be true to this strangely strong and happy section of my life.

Sounds like your third eye is open as well.  I hope your current blessings perpetuate!

I like this a lot poppy.

Consider replacing that second "perhaps" after power?

"confirmation perhaps, power moreso."

There's power to be had from clarity.

o O! I was trying to think of something for that too, and you nailed it.

Thank you sorted,

Do the other tinkers help? If you have the time, or has it confused it further? Thank you.

@ Ahavati :) GTMA

Consider

"An odd day
to be successful, rain and gloom and yet -"

"An odd day to be successful -
rain and gloom and yet"

Yet already implies a shift is in the works, so the dash afterwards it isn't really necessary.  The real shift comes after successful.  

There is a deep-seated phenomenon which removes veils off clarity.  Then it's like truly seeing something for the first time.  Except not just with the eyes, but the inside as well.  That is what this reminds me of. Beautiful work.

Thank you A,

I wanted to make something that covered what's going on here. Yesterday I went for a new position in my old career and got it, it's a big step up for me. I didn't realise how long I'd set aside my sense of purpose. Anyway, ramble gone.

Until again, friend

o O! Exciting!

This is beautiful!
"days of doubt and spite are buried in soil, giving energy to new seeds in their death.

Both eyes are open -
there is only love."
Yes!!! This is how I'm trying to live my life these days

Thank you! Our days should be like this, filled with bravely, adventure and positivity, I think.

there's a serenity here, even if gently questioned.  seeing with one's 'soul' is the truest way.  
 
in the spirit of critique, i'd offer these couple of thoughts:  
 
if the poem is set all in present tense, it avoids some small mental adjustments and creates a more dynamic voice. "a jay flies from the apple tree" & "a sense of pride I've not/never known" or "a sense of pride heretofore unknown" & "Life moves on".
 
 
"A sense of pride I hadn't known,  
confirmation perhaps, power perhaps."  
i'm all for reps when i believe they work, but maybe changing this, subtlely, to reflect the inner questioning?  
 
A sense of pride I hadn't known;  
confirmation? power, perhaps.  
 
 
Life moves on -  
Days of watching jays and squirrels plentiful,  
days of doubt and spite are buried in soil, giving energy to new seeds in their death.  
 
for this, above, i'd suggest omitting the 'in soil' and make 'giving' into 'give', splitting that line like so:  
 
"days of doubt are buried  
give energy to new seeds—  
life from death"  
i also think clarifying the 'in their death' would help: as it now stands, it's ambiguous and can read as if it were the seeds dying. of course, that way then gives you Life x2 close together, so some other way :D
 
 
even if you choose to leave as is, its message is still a beautiful one :)

Thank you so much for this full bodied critique. I always, always have an issue with tenses! And sometimes grammar, and sometimes not inviting the reader in! I so appreciate the length of detail you've gone to. I've tried to tinker with the sections you've alerted me to in mind while retaining my odd, straightforward way of penning. Does it work any better? I understand if not and can edit more in line with original critique. Thank you so much for taking the time. I'm entirely grateful.

you've gotta go with what feels right to you, your poem's voice.

:)