Dreamcatching

Thanks :)

Lovely and ethereal.  
 
In the spirit of honest critique, you don't need 'that's' in L2

Thank you ahavati, I trust your intuition, but why is that the case? If I may ask

This works really well, nice short

Thank you :)

In my opinion it's extraneous. When something can be said succinctly without words, those extras can be trimmed.  

what more is a dream

than a thought out of reach

waiting to be caught

I do like the flow of that better, the reason I included it was to maintain the 5-7-5 format of haiku, unless 6 syllables still counts it as a haiku in another format

Oops! I totally posted this response in the wrong place. Only Western Haiku are trapped in the stringent 5-7-5 syllabic count. Eastern haiku recommends that in English not exceed 12 haikus.  It doesn't mean they can't; however, the recommendation is based on one becoming too wordy, or excessive.  In other words, writers will fill with words to meet the syllabic requirements, not because it contributes to the verse.

Simply brilliant.. really dig this..





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thank you for the rl entry and comment :) it’s much appreciated