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Dark Love, Sleepless Night
( a double Sonnet )
I stand before this soul of mourning stars
That drift within the bound’ries of my heart.
To ever show the light my open scars,
And keep desire stilled when we’re apart.
To separate the nature of my pain
While even in a crowd I am alone.
Forbidden tears ignite and fall as rain,
But never will they see a love that’s flown.
Determined, the inclusion of my truth,
The heaven-sent of you is ever near.
And driven by the beauty of our youth,
A reckless, hopeful, carefree, happy year!
I only hope for love, I won’t pretend.
To have it for a day, to never end.
It was the moon that overflowed with milk,
And kept the atrium of night awake.
While pouring out my grief in shades of silk,
You looked on mockingly then turned away.
A chrysalis, I bled with every sting,
A deity, the dignity you bore.
And yet, from pillars of each broken wing,
I heard you weep across a barren shore.
A morning rise of oranges from a tree,
The moon becomes an apple as it sets.
Below, among the shells of sand’s debris,
The stillborn tides of day will soon forget.
When love is dark it blends in with the night,
So when love cannot sleep the moon is bright.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 3rd Oct 2019
| Edited 29th Aug 2020
Author's Note
Inspired by two of Federico Garcia Lorca’s sonnets http://www.openletteronline.com/main/2006/11/sonnets_of_dark_love_sonetos_d-print.html
written to a gay lover, and never published while he lived. This is the series he was composing at the time of his tragic murder by Franco’s fascist forces in 1936.
written to a gay lover, and never published while he lived. This is the series he was composing at the time of his tragic murder by Franco’s fascist forces in 1936.
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3rd Oct 2019 9:52pm
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3rd Oct 2019 11:06pm
such good reading, jade
my favourite stanza's this:
It was the moon that overflowed with milk
And kept the atrium of night awake.
While pouring out my grief in shades of silk
You looked on mockingly then turned away.
it read fresh to my eyes, not having come across (that i recall) those particular phrasings before. really nice. as is the final rhyming couplet.
my favourite stanza's this:
It was the moon that overflowed with milk
And kept the atrium of night awake.
While pouring out my grief in shades of silk
You looked on mockingly then turned away.
it read fresh to my eyes, not having come across (that i recall) those particular phrasings before. really nice. as is the final rhyming couplet.
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4th Oct 2019 2:50am
Omgosh, dear Jan, how wonderful to see you here! And thank you for your insight & generous thoughts as a sister of the Pen. 🐅
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4th Oct 2019 00:29am
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4th Oct 2019 3:23am
My humble thanks to you, dear Hunter, that you’ve kindly stopped by to visit! And the infectious spirit that rings through your comment has me feeling rejuvenated, so pleased by your uplifting reaction!
Re. Dark Love, Sleepless Night
4th Oct 2019 2:20am
This is really exquisite, I love it, after having read some of Lorcas poems for his comp, I can really see the inspiration here, it sounds like him, you have him mastered :)
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Oh dear, I’m so very touched, my sister. It’s hard for me to find another lesser-used way to express the joy due to the honors you have gifted me with (you see, it’s my b-day on the 4th so this is all e.xtra special for me)
And also special is how Lorca first influenced me when I discovered and read him years ago. I’m thrilled how you now know of him & appreciate what he did.
And also special is how Lorca first influenced me when I discovered and read him years ago. I’m thrilled how you now know of him & appreciate what he did.
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4th Oct 2019 3:58am
May the Moon overflow with Happy Birthdays and paint them in an amber glow to endure with love on the sky's frescoe :)
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4th Oct 2019 4:49am
That...
is so beautiful, PR my dear, and I’ll print it out on my copier once I add the words to some artwork. In fact, I’ll fix it so I can post it here on site for you and anyone else who connects can see.
🐾💖👰🏻
is so beautiful, PR my dear, and I’ll print it out on my copier once I add the words to some artwork. In fact, I’ll fix it so I can post it here on site for you and anyone else who connects can see.
🐾💖👰🏻
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4th Oct 2019 4:57am
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4th Oct 2019 10:38pm
Wow the helter skelter of love, relationships are not happy but unavoidable. Sincerity is a trap of the hunter!!! Awesome thriller, I agree with Hunterapsych (Shaman among machines)
Absolutely an amazing piece!! Wow left me stunned
Absolutely an amazing piece!! Wow left me stunned
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5th Oct 2019 7:02am
Thank you so much for dropping in for a read, and giving me your thoughts, I really appreciate that. I’m glad that you enjoyed.
Re. Dark Love, Sleepless Night
5th Oct 2019 3:11pm
How perfect this captures the essence of how I read Lorca. Brilliant!
tommy cat
tommy cat
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Grateful from the honor to have recited the piece to you, I thank you for the precious time you gave, so close when work awaits on a chilly early morn.
Jadey🐅
Jadey🐅
Re. Dark Love, Sleepless Night
5th Oct 2019 6:38pm
"It was the moon that overflowed with milk" truly a wonderful description and emotion behind this piece. These classical poets certain made the world go round.
Lovely write Ms. Jade, good luck in the comp.
Lovely write Ms. Jade, good luck in the comp.
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5th Oct 2019 6:55pm
Thank you very much, Wally, I will admit I hoped you’d be stopping by to read this - your literary observations are almost soothing to me. I’m so glad you enjoyed.
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6th Oct 2019 11:44pm
Your title reminds me of my write, Six Killings, Five Ghosts. You move fluidly through formal stanzas, which is always admirable. The depth of each is something I have been sitting here considering for some time. The smell of dinner wafting across the house kind of woke me from my reverie. It is breathtaking. I weep for the competition sweetheart.
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9th Oct 2019 6:54pm
Daniel, I’m honored, and I thank you.
I meant to mention earlier; I’ve done an audio of this write, and wondered if It might be a worthwhile submission for the Project.
I meant to mention earlier; I’ve done an audio of this write, and wondered if It might be a worthwhile submission for the Project.
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10th Oct 2019 7:18pm
Absolutely send away. We'll put it in an upcoming episode and really appreciate the participation. <3
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12th Oct 2019 3:15pm
Stunning & exquisite. The images are fresh & fascinating. Absolute masterclass.
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13th Oct 2019 7:08am
Hello, my friend, it’s good to see you.
And such honors from your thoughtful words of enjoyment, and for the addition to your RL.🙏🏻
May all be well,
Jade🐾
And such honors from your thoughtful words of enjoyment, and for the addition to your RL.🙏🏻
May all be well,
Jade🐾
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18th Oct 2019 00:29am
Merci ma chère fille! It’s good to see you, and I’m honored by your words of enjoyment, and for the recommend. x
I have admired Lorca ever since my early years as a fledgling poet, and written about him. I encourage you get acquainted with his Andalusian life & work.
I have admired Lorca ever since my early years as a fledgling poet, and written about him. I encourage you get acquainted with his Andalusian life & work.