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Gran 2 ( A Big Thanks to Cafe Critique )
Put a jumper on, you'll catch your death out there
But Gran I will get too hot
It's blowing a hoolie out there
I'll be fine Gran
Pull your socks up Davey
Ok! Gran, pulling my socks up
Did you put your vest on?
Yes Gran
Let me check
Erm,....
May god smite you down for that lie
I just forgot
You Lied!
But Gran it makes me itchy
Yes, and lying makes god angry!
I am sorry Gran
Say you’re sorry to Jesus!
I'm, sorry Jesus
Fix your collar it's standing up
Yeah, like Elvis
Elvis is the devils' music!
But Graaaaaan ...
There'll be no Elvis’s in here I can assure you
Ok Gran, turning down my collar
That collar has a tide mark it’s filthy
But I'm just going out to play
Cleanliness is next to godliness - Change your shirt!
But Gran, do I have to
What if you got hit by a bus, I would be mortified, oh the shame
But Graaaaaaaaaaaaaaan!
Have you got clean underwear on, don’t you embarrass me!
[ I hurriedly went to change
There's a shirt rearrange
Check my underpants
Clean as my maiden Aunts
Put my shirt on back to front
A humorous and cunning stunt
Put my jack on front to back
Hope she'll laugh and not just smack
Slowly approaching I reach her
In a dog collar looking like a preacher
She doesn’t laugh, she doesn’t smack
She’s struggling to keep the tears back ]
Awe Davey lad you look bonnie dressed as a pastor, I would be so proud of you being in the service of the Lord.
Don’t cry Gran, please don't cry
[ We Hug ]
I love you Davey lad
I love you to Granny
Your mother would be so proud of you
No: No she wouldn't, she wouldn't care
But she isn’t playing with a full set of dominoes, she's not well
Aye Gran,............ aye
Published 30th Sep 2019
Author's Note
A big thank you to all at Cafe Critique - it looks and sounds so much better
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30th Sep 2019 3:22am
Dear D,
Lovely tribute to your grandmother. I think they are all cut from the same bolt of cloth whether they are gran’s, nonna’s, gramma’s. They love hard and with an abnormal sensitivity to being cold. Lovely write! H🌷
Lovely tribute to your grandmother. I think they are all cut from the same bolt of cloth whether they are gran’s, nonna’s, gramma’s. They love hard and with an abnormal sensitivity to being cold. Lovely write! H🌷
7th Oct 2019 00:10am
thank you, my friend, I do enjoy writing about my Gran, we had a strong bond, stronger than any other. I had much love for her and miss her terribly
Aye Davey, most Grannies seemed to be cut from the same bolt o’ tartan plaid... I know me mum’s mum was. ( the Stuart clan ) Ah the tales I could tell ya lad!
30th Sep 2019 7:30am
your comment so made me smile - I have fond memories of my Gran. Rare happy memories from childhood.
from a different generation with a different attitude
thank you :-)))))))))))))))))))))
from a different generation with a different attitude
thank you :-)))))))))))))))))))))
30th Sep 2019 4:01pm
Both amusing and poignant at the same time. I enjoyed the read - thanks for sharing!
7th Oct 2019 00:11am
30th Sep 2019 8:03pm
The dialogue is charming, and when you move into the boldface, with it's lilt of rhyme and heartfelt exposition, it really crystallizes the read for me. It is like a moment when a spotlight falls on an individual in a production and you know an important moment has arrived. Close is heart warming. I'm glad the Cafe was so helpful! It's a lovely vulnerable write.
7th Oct 2019 00:16am
thank you so much, Daniel. When I write about my gran it takes me to a special place that is filled with warmth and love with this no-nonsense grandma so full of love. It was a different world - not a rose-coloured version but these were happy and abiding memories
Cafe Critique was instrumental in improving the piece, some great suggestions and edits :-))))))))))))))
Cafe Critique was instrumental in improving the piece, some great suggestions and edits :-))))))))))))))
