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SULK
Was a time
When if I sulked
You would come to me
And if you sulked
I would come to you
Now we sulk
Staring in different directions
Mere feet from each other
But it might as well be
Light years
When if I sulked
You would come to me
And if you sulked
I would come to you
Now we sulk
Staring in different directions
Mere feet from each other
But it might as well be
Light years
Published 27th Sep 2019
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Anonymous
27th Sep 2019 4:37am
Now that puts a lot of perspective into brevity
Nice tight write
Wonder if you could drop the final two lines though instead of releasing the tension of the piece with a tell
The body language descriptions do enough of that for me
Nice tight write
Wonder if you could drop the final two lines though instead of releasing the tension of the piece with a tell
The body language descriptions do enough of that for me
27th Sep 2019 4:42am
If I knew another way to preserve or even enhance the spatial paradox, I would give it a shot. Thank you for the food for thought!
27th Sep 2019 5:33am
Evolved into a Passive - Aggressive relationship
at least that's how this reads for me
at least that's how this reads for me
Anonymous
- Edited 15th Oct 2019 1:45pm
27th Sep 2019 4:45pm
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