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Breaking Storm
From land or sea
By action a magnitude of moments
Between rising fronts
Brought to bare
I came to be
Here where I fell
I was meant to be
The final act in all
Was but the slightest shift if all
A sum of weight
That could not wait
Or dispensate
Began to fall
In the torrents berate
What was once before
Fell before
And devastations bore
Children upon its wake
Cast to sea by a wind of scorn
What ills and tides will be despised
What thrills and lives will stand to rise
Will only be known in parting of clouds
And the drying of my eyes.
By action a magnitude of moments
Between rising fronts
Brought to bare
I came to be
Here where I fell
I was meant to be
The final act in all
Was but the slightest shift if all
A sum of weight
That could not wait
Or dispensate
Began to fall
In the torrents berate
What was once before
Fell before
And devastations bore
Children upon its wake
Cast to sea by a wind of scorn
What ills and tides will be despised
What thrills and lives will stand to rise
Will only be known in parting of clouds
And the drying of my eyes.
Published 25th Sep 2019
Author's Note
Despite the turmoil, hope that better lives are found and made for all concerned.
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25th Sep 2019 3:07am
25th Sep 2019 9:19am
25th Sep 2019 3:19am
Hope should have a bow on it and often given. This was a deep write of shared experience and obvious trials and tribulation. Where ever you have landed...let it be of better soil and where hope is most found alive and well. Thank you for the hopeful read. Aloha Dark.
25th Sep 2019 9:30am
Dark, I hear you and landing or breaking from both a voice that calls me on.
Thank you.
Thank you.
25th Sep 2019 11:49am
This has a classic and timeless feel to it, a repetition of existence that is most difficult to explain.
I enjoyed reading it.
In the spirit of honest critique I would say the commas are unnecessary,
as the end of lines constitutes a pause. Also,
Here [were] I fell *where
I enjoyed reading it.
In the spirit of honest critique I would say the commas are unnecessary,
as the end of lines constitutes a pause. Also,
Here [were] I fell *where
25th Sep 2019 3:23pm
Ahavati,
Thank you for the sentiment and critique both are gratefully received.
Thank you for the sentiment and critique both are gratefully received.
