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Passing Through
A hard time I had of it:
travelled a slow thousand metres
on the old rowing machine,
a sharp daily wake-up before breakfast
melting away bleary-eyed dreams
straining the view West
to a sunlit village in the distance
with a river of mist above the Mondego valley.
A beautiful bird glided past the window
as the last star faded into new light
showing me a way beyond folly;
and I’m glad it did.
Unencumbered by retrospective shame or guilt
though perhaps sensing an underlying whisper of fear
having escaped several times an early death
from the ever-prowling cat,
it flew free of accusatory names, labels, suppositions
past the palm tree
and landed on the Albizia
joining with others for a morning chorus.
The garden oasis Nature created
with a little additional human sweat,
grows on an original rocky terrain with a long history,
revealed after an unoriginal pile of rubble
left by messy builders was first cleaned up;
deep holes dug with a jack-hammer
provide special bell-pits filled with rich soil
for each and every bush, flower and tree planted.
But clock this:
when the bird finally dies
and I too cease my regular visitations
leaving this world to its evolutionary ambitions,
the patch of land will continue to bring forth fruit
filled with valuable memories of conscious beings
who, once upon a time, made their contribution
passing through.
#T.S.Eliot
travelled a slow thousand metres
on the old rowing machine,
a sharp daily wake-up before breakfast
melting away bleary-eyed dreams
straining the view West
to a sunlit village in the distance
with a river of mist above the Mondego valley.
A beautiful bird glided past the window
as the last star faded into new light
showing me a way beyond folly;
and I’m glad it did.
Unencumbered by retrospective shame or guilt
though perhaps sensing an underlying whisper of fear
having escaped several times an early death
from the ever-prowling cat,
it flew free of accusatory names, labels, suppositions
past the palm tree
and landed on the Albizia
joining with others for a morning chorus.
The garden oasis Nature created
with a little additional human sweat,
grows on an original rocky terrain with a long history,
revealed after an unoriginal pile of rubble
left by messy builders was first cleaned up;
deep holes dug with a jack-hammer
provide special bell-pits filled with rich soil
for each and every bush, flower and tree planted.
But clock this:
when the bird finally dies
and I too cease my regular visitations
leaving this world to its evolutionary ambitions,
the patch of land will continue to bring forth fruit
filled with valuable memories of conscious beings
who, once upon a time, made their contribution
passing through.
#T.S.Eliot
Written by
Josh
(Joshua Bond)
Published 22nd Sep 2019
| Edited 9th Mar 2024
Author's Note
Comp entry for #T.S.Eliot, hosted by Johnny Blaze.
Inspired by Eliot's poem "Journey of the Magi", here:
https://www.poetryarchive.org/poem/journey-magi
and my audio of it here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM.
Photo taken June 2019, of a Golden-Gage Plumb tree in our garden.
(photo credit: Joshua Bond. Object: a fully-laden golden-gauge plum tree in our garden)
Inspired by Eliot's poem "Journey of the Magi", here:
https://www.poetryarchive.org/poem/journey-magi
and my audio of it here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM.
Photo taken June 2019, of a Golden-Gage Plumb tree in our garden.
(photo credit: Joshua Bond. Object: a fully-laden golden-gauge plum tree in our garden)
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Re. Passing Through
22nd Sep 2019 11:21pm
A very fine entry Josh...great visual poem my friend...and I love birds.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Passing Through
22nd Sep 2019 11:30pm
Thank you Harry for reading & commenting again. We have hoopoe birds round here; they eat the 'procession caterpillars' (who are nasty little critters with ultra-fine spikes known to kill any dog that tries to eat them) - and you don't want them to spike your hands either. So we love hoopoe birds. Since the Oct 2017 firestorm which burnt everything around us, our garden has become a bird's paradise - and our cat is doing her best to lower the numbers :))
Have a good week. Best regards, Josh.
Have a good week. Best regards, Josh.
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23rd Sep 2019 00:15am
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Anonymous
23rd Sep 2019 4:16am
It's weird ( the word of the day ). I don't hear an accent when I read your work. What I do hear in my head is someone who has been reciting poetry his entire life and could craft a riveting poem about any ordinary thing, event or day. This is a compelling composition; even moreso than the inspiration poem of Eliot's. Good luck in the challenge, Josh.
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23rd Sep 2019 7:00pm
Thank you so much Johnny for your encouraging words - and please pass on an electron thankyou pulse to Magnetron for the RL.
Accent? Lancastrian-Mancunian ameliorated by 9 years at boarding-schools.
I enjoy reciting poetry, so much so that I now have a new youtube channel with 65 uploads to date of others' poetry (including Eliot's Journey of the Magi) which you can find here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM
... and now to Rupi Kaur :))
Accent? Lancastrian-Mancunian ameliorated by 9 years at boarding-schools.
I enjoy reciting poetry, so much so that I now have a new youtube channel with 65 uploads to date of others' poetry (including Eliot's Journey of the Magi) which you can find here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM
... and now to Rupi Kaur :))
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loved hearing your voice reading your words. i do miss the british accent here at times...
my favourite line, written AND spoken, for all the words encompass:
"leaving this world to its evolutionary ambitions,"
my favourite line, written AND spoken, for all the words encompass:
"leaving this world to its evolutionary ambitions,"
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Re: Re. Passing Through
23rd Sep 2019 7:07pm
You have very good antennae, Butter. That line was the most inspired of all and I knew it as soon as it flowed out of the pen.
British accents? If you don't mind Northern - that's good. Remember too DUP is English-based { :)) }. Listen to Episode IV of the Poetcast Project and the interview with the founder/web-miss.
You can find my other DUP spoken-word poems here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/sort/poems-by/Josh/spoken-word/
And thank you for the RL.
And a belated welcome to DUP.
Best regards, Josh.
British accents? If you don't mind Northern - that's good. Remember too DUP is English-based { :)) }. Listen to Episode IV of the Poetcast Project and the interview with the founder/web-miss.
You can find my other DUP spoken-word poems here:
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/sort/poems-by/Josh/spoken-word/
And thank you for the RL.
And a belated welcome to DUP.
Best regards, Josh.
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been listening to your pieces - lots to enjoy!
northern???
of those who can write damned good poetry there aren't so many good at voicing it (to my ear) and that can put me right off a piece. it's often why i prefer to read rather than listen to poems. i count myself in as one of those not too great at reading/recording - but still do it now and again, in the full knowledge that it 'needs work' :rollseyes:
northern???
of those who can write damned good poetry there aren't so many good at voicing it (to my ear) and that can put me right off a piece. it's often why i prefer to read rather than listen to poems. i count myself in as one of those not too great at reading/recording - but still do it now and again, in the full knowledge that it 'needs work' :rollseyes:
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Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 3:48pm
Glad you enjoyed the audios; really nice to get some positive feed-back that it's all worth while.
Accent: "northern??? " Well it was softened by boarding school - however I haven't forgotten my roots which are always hovering in my vocal chords.
Maybe I'll record one of Ted Hughes' poems in my deep Lancastrian accent - but I'm afraid it might start another war with Yorkshire :))
Accent: "northern??? " Well it was softened by boarding school - however I haven't forgotten my roots which are always hovering in my vocal chords.
Maybe I'll record one of Ted Hughes' poems in my deep Lancastrian accent - but I'm afraid it might start another war with Yorkshire :))
Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 7:15pm
listening to you, i'd never have had you down for a northerner, especially a manc/lanc - came across as a well-spoken london accent - which is why it surprised me given your flat cap :D
a bit like hearing james mcavoy speaking in his regular voice after hearing him speak the queen's english in so many films!
would love to hear your more northerly accents!
a bit like hearing james mcavoy speaking in his regular voice after hearing him speak the queen's english in so many films!
would love to hear your more northerly accents!
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Re. Passing Through
23rd Sep 2019 11:41am
Not only was Eliot a leading poet of the avant-garde, he was most noted for seeing between what was seen, or through it, such as the Four Quartets. His observations were expressed through a modernistic approach that defied traditional poetry, and yet incorporated its tenants. This also has a touch of transcendentalism in it, to me.
You always deliver clear and concise readings, Josh. Thank you for braving Eliot! Best of luck in the comp.
You always deliver clear and concise readings, Josh. Thank you for braving Eliot! Best of luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 3:38pm
Thank you for your comments, A; and the RL. (you're very generous with your RLs of me). I have to say I struggle to 'get' Eliot partly because he wrote from the strength of such a deep classical education with umpteen obscure references. I found his "Journey of the Magi" very accessible though.
Re. Passing Through
23rd Sep 2019 4:09pm
An enjoyed read, then enhanced as I listened to the audio.
Thank you for the privilege, Josh
Thank you for the privilege, Josh
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Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 3:41pm
Thank you Tryst, and for the RL. I'm into a recording binge at the moment with a new youtube channel (joshua-bond-recites-poetry) and you can find my reading of Eliot's poem "Journey of the Magi" (which inspired my poem) here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-If7JXK2tdM
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Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 3:57pm
Thank you HF for listening and commenting; glad you liked the audio - I'm currently having a binge on recording.
"I wasn’t expecting the expression: “but clock this.” "
... I added this in as a reflection of Eliot's lead-in to the last part of his "Journey of the Magi" poem which inspired mine and where he writes:
"All this was a long time ago, I remember,
And I would do it again, but set down
This set down
This: were we led all that way for ..."
I will add a link to my audio of his poem in the "author's Notes".
"I wasn’t expecting the expression: “but clock this.” "
... I added this in as a reflection of Eliot's lead-in to the last part of his "Journey of the Magi" poem which inspired mine and where he writes:
"All this was a long time ago, I remember,
And I would do it again, but set down
This set down
This: were we led all that way for ..."
I will add a link to my audio of his poem in the "author's Notes".
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24th Sep 2019 8:15pm
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24th Sep 2019 9:05pm
The sense of surrender of self into oneness with nature permeates both writes, I can see the essential spirit connection with Eliot's piece. The details are charming, rendered with ease, unhurried, your performance is wonderful. Nice sense of the cyclic continuity in your close. It has a personal, spiritual sense about it, which is relatable and winsome. Nice work Josh.
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Re: Re. Passing Through
24th Sep 2019 10:38pm
Thank you Daniel for your always helpful, insightful and supportive comments. I'm glad you liked the audio. I'm having a binge recording other poets' poems which helps me get to know them more deeply as well as practice the audio style. Best regards, Josh.
Re. Passing Through
25th Sep 2019 5:32am
I love the title of this because it really conveys the observational mood of TS Elliot, his struggle to find sense of things in a changing world, his detachment in that sense, the word 'passive' in passing. This is a great entry, I could picture it being read in TS Elliots voice, you captured his tenor with your own. It is very much on his theme of ending and beginning being one and the same..
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Re: Re. Passing Through
25th Sep 2019 10:23pm
Thank you PR for checking this out, and commenting.
I listened to Eliot reading some of his own poems with a view to emulating his accent as well - and then thought the better of it (right decision I think).
Funny you mention "theme of ending and beginning" because I have just uploaded my reciting a poem by the Polish poet Wislawa Szymborska entitled "The End and The Beginning" which you can listen to here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FtGhM0rI1cU
I find it hard to get my head around Eliot with so many obscure references but I reckon you captured something important by noting his 'detached observance' as a poet's stance for articulating the world as he sees it in his poetry.
Best regards, Josh.
I listened to Eliot reading some of his own poems with a view to emulating his accent as well - and then thought the better of it (right decision I think).
Funny you mention "theme of ending and beginning" because I have just uploaded my reciting a poem by the Polish poet Wislawa Szymborska entitled "The End and The Beginning" which you can listen to here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FtGhM0rI1cU
I find it hard to get my head around Eliot with so many obscure references but I reckon you captured something important by noting his 'detached observance' as a poet's stance for articulating the world as he sees it in his poetry.
Best regards, Josh.
Re. Passing Through
25th Sep 2019 11:29pm
I thoroughly enjoyed this. That last stanza is truly brilliant, although we're gone everything else continues. It was written (and delivered) so eloquent and natural.
Good luck in the competition.
Good luck in the competition.
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Re: Re. Passing Through
26th Sep 2019 4:16pm
Glad you enjoyed it Wally, and thank you for the RL too. I'm reminded of an interview with Robert frost towards then end of his life and he was asked what he had learnt (of life) - he replied "it goes on".
I enjoyed your interview on the recent PoetCast. Really nice to hear your reading of your poems too. Best regards, Josh.
I enjoyed your interview on the recent PoetCast. Really nice to hear your reading of your poems too. Best regards, Josh.
Re. Passing Through
28th Sep 2019 11:14am
Very vivacious descriptive ecos of aerial n terrain of Nature around within you traverse in such natural pace... so well so long...but the sharply precise clocking message cut right through in a thorough alerting tone a sorta grim yet a pleasantness n non-ignorance of collective consciousness or to boil down simple as a focussing on each interfunctional interdependent participative ecological matrix we hang on so delicate like a domino effect...or more so an existential realm's memoir or essentialism's Eternity ever present in here there inspite of passing through... Just me as always dear Josh.. your poem ever evokes stratas n layers of lighted revelations built upon in your nuancing art...thanks for this, in Tamil an adage we have " karmame kannaayiram'" means " performing karma or simply one's duty is equivalent to thousand eyes' of imperative presence or importance" ..your birdclock alarm starkly reminds me of that ..in gentle verses as you ever do ..bravo, write on :)
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Re: Re. Passing Through
28th Sep 2019 10:39pm
Thank yo Suma for such an interesting reply. It's really uplifting to me that you can connect with it from a differing culture and experience of life. The Tamil adage you quote puts (for me) a better sense of the value and meaning of 'duty' than I was brought up on. My father's and grandfathers' "duty" was to go and fight a war "and not to count the cost" ("I expect every man shall do his duty" - King George VI).
So I now see 'duty' as conceptually 'duty-right-destiny' - something we were born to do that uplifts life, rather than a heavy burden.
And thank you for the RL; I'm honoured.
So I now see 'duty' as conceptually 'duty-right-destiny' - something we were born to do that uplifts life, rather than a heavy burden.
And thank you for the RL; I'm honoured.