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Throw Away The Key....
It takes the opening of antiquated doors
& watching the bittersweet narrative play out before us.
To wander the nostalgic hallways, in awe, at the mortar & stone that we've built around picturesque landscapes.
Allowing a peace ~ like numbness to eclipse the burdening torment
__ just as the last curtain has been called. Realizing the fractured heart and impassioned tears were just a casualty
of a mere...
a p p a r i t i o n
... to finally place a padlock upon pain.
Those rivers of brine water & mascara are no longer to be a part of the script.
& watching the bittersweet narrative play out before us.
To wander the nostalgic hallways, in awe, at the mortar & stone that we've built around picturesque landscapes.
Allowing a peace ~ like numbness to eclipse the burdening torment
__ just as the last curtain has been called. Realizing the fractured heart and impassioned tears were just a casualty
of a mere...
a p p a r i t i o n
... to finally place a padlock upon pain.
Those rivers of brine water & mascara are no longer to be a part of the script.
Written by
PandoraUnleashed
Published 1st Sep 2019
| Edited 6th Jul 2020
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Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 8:14pm
This is so beautifully penned in its state of melancholy my sweet poetess, a very nice ink stain
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2nd Sep 2019 5:49pm
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1st Sep 2019 8:15pm
Oh wow, standing ovation here dear miss. Bravo to your write. Pain is inevitable it will occur in all situations. But the way you laid out looking back over the beauty before to the hearache at hand and learning to let go. Bravo
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 8:25pm
Thank you so very kindly, Liam, for a wonderful comment! I plan on being here more often once again, so I'll be able to follow you closely now....
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2nd Sep 2019 8:38pm
It's so nice to see you on my page & with such an in depth reveiw! I always welcome constructive criticism. There's one thing about me & that's my insistence on being somewhat odd, so I probably puzzle many here with the way I do things. 😅...or change that to, " I know I do.."
I used " awe" because it fit for me..I revisited something that brought happiness & sadness, so that was perfect imo because of such the journey I went through...
Awe : .A feeling of respect or reverence mixed with dread and wonder, often inspired by something majestic or powerful
I do hope you can keep this rustic door in mind, and stick around here with us. I can promise it's worth it! Thank you for the generous compliments too ... it's all appreciated here!
I used " awe" because it fit for me..I revisited something that brought happiness & sadness, so that was perfect imo because of such the journey I went through...
Awe : .A feeling of respect or reverence mixed with dread and wonder, often inspired by something majestic or powerful
I do hope you can keep this rustic door in mind, and stick around here with us. I can promise it's worth it! Thank you for the generous compliments too ... it's all appreciated here!
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2nd Sep 2019 8:43pm
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 8:49pm
Awesome....I'm glad you decided to return to us then! Welcome back...
Pfft to caliber..... I'm a hot mess with proper writing, but I dearly appreciate the sentiment!
Pfft to caliber..... I'm a hot mess with proper writing, but I dearly appreciate the sentiment!
Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 8:41pm
based on this spill
one might want You to be in everlasting pain
as this is spectacular ink
I will wait patiently for when You are in everlasting Joy
and savor more that ink
for now,
Wow and well done with darker drips
one might want You to be in everlasting pain
as this is spectacular ink
I will wait patiently for when You are in everlasting Joy
and savor more that ink
for now,
Wow and well done with darker drips
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 8:46pm
Thank you so very much, Tallen!
First of all, your avi always gives me the giggles, so thank you for that! 😅
Secondly, thank you for the praise & care you've shown. It's obvious that I avoid this genre & go straight for the sexy stuff. So I did step out of my comfort zone a little. I should more often. It was actually my own mind that wanted my heart to hurt, but I finally saw the BIG picture & knew a years worth of tears were wasted...but another lesson down! I'm in a good spot & can finally be around my family here more often with all that bs out of the way!
Hugs your way!!!
First of all, your avi always gives me the giggles, so thank you for that! 😅
Secondly, thank you for the praise & care you've shown. It's obvious that I avoid this genre & go straight for the sexy stuff. So I did step out of my comfort zone a little. I should more often. It was actually my own mind that wanted my heart to hurt, but I finally saw the BIG picture & knew a years worth of tears were wasted...but another lesson down! I'm in a good spot & can finally be around my family here more often with all that bs out of the way!
Hugs your way!!!
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 8:52pm
Thank you, dear MR..I'm so ready to be back for good & catch your pretty & elegant works more often.🌹
Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 8:51pm
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2nd Sep 2019 8:54pm
Wow, thank you! That was actually a very poetic comment.👌
Please forgive my absences from here as I have rarely been to your page. That's changing though & I'll see you soon!....
Please forgive my absences from here as I have rarely been to your page. That's changing though & I'll see you soon!....
Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 9:10pm
I can only echo MysticalRose. I have a deep feeling about it that I can’t quite put into words.
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2nd Sep 2019 8:56pm
Thank you, Eerie...I'm humbled by any comment from you. I do hope things are better with you..🌹
Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 9:48pm
There's no key to bolt the door after it slams you in the face , then locks you out. You have to use a solid wedge to disable the old hinges.
Your prose is both beautiful and sad. I could finish by saying.... don't waste anymore tears. .... But who am I to put a value on your emotions? I'm rambling. What I will say is.... I can see that you wrote this with ink bleeding from your heart, because I tasted every drop. I t was an excellent write Pandy.
Your prose is both beautiful and sad. I could finish by saying.... don't waste anymore tears. .... But who am I to put a value on your emotions? I'm rambling. What I will say is.... I can see that you wrote this with ink bleeding from your heart, because I tasted every drop. I t was an excellent write Pandy.
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 9:02pm
Well you know this chickie better now, and she ain't crying anymore!😀
David, your friendship, support, appreciation...and especially you being here now are wonderful blessings. Thank you so much.
You'll be reading it again today. I guess you get the test drive on one site or the other...
David, your friendship, support, appreciation...and especially you being here now are wonderful blessings. Thank you so much.
You'll be reading it again today. I guess you get the test drive on one site or the other...
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2nd Sep 2019 10:08pm
I'm definitely privileged to be considered a true friend. Pandy. That in itself is a blessing to me. 🤗
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Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 10:15pm
Brava, Pandora! I love the resolve demonstrated in the last two lines.
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2nd Sep 2019 9:05pm
Thank you, my sweet & oversexed friend...(just had to tease about that authors note of yours)...Any fandom from you is welcome in my world!;)
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2nd Sep 2019 9:33pm
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2nd Sep 2019 9:46pm
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2nd Sep 2019 10:33pm
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2nd Sep 2019 11:00pm
I was just kidding....hehee🤭
We go in spells around here, but Pandy used to be "too much" to handle for years..... ..hmmm🙄.....now I've got him begging.
We go in spells around here, but Pandy used to be "too much" to handle for years..... ..hmmm🙄.....now I've got him begging.
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3rd Sep 2019 2:45am
Re. Throw Away The Key....
1st Sep 2019 10:34pm
Although of a somber, reflective nature, you have captured that mood with such finesse. One of your best.
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 9:09pm
Oh bless you, T...that's such a wonderful comment considering this obviously isn't my genre. I appreciate the room on your RL too. It's nice to be around you once again, I've gotta hit your page today!
Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 1:09am
I can't help but agree with Tenderloin. This is one of your best. Beautiful....
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 9:13pm
OMG, It's you..
I got so excited to see your name pop up, crow! I've missed your presence & do hope you're feeling better too. I haven't frequented as much, so maybe you returned sooner. The Deep has had some awkwardness to quite a few of us lately & perhaps, it's all our missing family members. Oh...thank you for the great comment & add. Big hugs!
I got so excited to see your name pop up, crow! I've missed your presence & do hope you're feeling better too. I haven't frequented as much, so maybe you returned sooner. The Deep has had some awkwardness to quite a few of us lately & perhaps, it's all our missing family members. Oh...thank you for the great comment & add. Big hugs!
Re. Throw Away The Key....
2nd Sep 2019 2:06am
You really took me there. You worked your metaphor as adeptly as Van Gogh but the written word your brush and the page your canvas. The imagery evoked an asylum with the resident patiently waiting for freedom behind locked doors. Truly an apt symbolism for emotional shackles. This is truly awesome. John
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
John....
Thank you for totally blowing up my ego here lately. You've dropped a whole lot of awesome on me .......I'm beaming!
"The imagery evoked an asylum with the resident patiently waiting for freedom behind locked doors..."
......but not like you did in your write! I appreciate the kind words & that add too..
Thank you for totally blowing up my ego here lately. You've dropped a whole lot of awesome on me .......I'm beaming!
"The imagery evoked an asylum with the resident patiently waiting for freedom behind locked doors..."
......but not like you did in your write! I appreciate the kind words & that add too..
Re. Throw Away The Key....
3rd Sep 2019 5:06am
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3rd Sep 2019 7:46pm
Ah, it's always so delightful to see you around, Noire. I've miss your words, so hopefully you brought some with you!;)
I'm blessed by your recognition, thank you for the add! ♡
I'm blessed by your recognition, thank you for the add! ♡
Re. Throw Away The Key....
Anonymous
3rd Sep 2019 2:35pm
Girl, I'm right there with you on this...still working my way forward. One day at a time. Stole my heartbeat with this one...
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Re: Re. Throw Away The Key....
3rd Sep 2019 7:50pm
That's all we can do once we wake the f up;)
Your recognition always means so much, I can't thank you enough for the add, Willow. Hugs!
Your recognition always means so much, I can't thank you enough for the add, Willow. Hugs!
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3rd Sep 2019 7:53pm
For the guy whose become one of the greatest talents in the Deep [after being advised to please not leave;)].... your words & add are a blessing!
......I appreciate you, HF.
......I appreciate you, HF.
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Re. Throw Away The Key....
6th Sep 2019 11:09pm
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7th Sep 2019 1:06am
Thank you, Davey;) Big hugs for that add too... you big teddy bear! Xx
Re. Throw Away The Key....
29th Sep 2019 2:16am
Not being funny but I use paracetamol tablets to relieve my pain, it's far simpler, lol.
But I am also a shallow person, I know that. I tend to see things literally or in black & white.
That's possibly why I am not a great poet. I hope also that the pain you describe is just that, an illusion, possibly. :-)
But I am also a shallow person, I know that. I tend to see things literally or in black & white.
That's possibly why I am not a great poet. I hope also that the pain you describe is just that, an illusion, possibly. :-)
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