Sinister of the Sea

this is great i know how you feel been there lost i have been  

you are realy truly an inspiring person to me..and i thank you for all your suport

you are kind to i never be call and bodys insperation that aa new one for me and i thank you for that i never thought i be that to no-one

well you are to me :)

I love how the words flow together, its nice

thanks..i do try

You know friend, with each write you get better and better this is a lovely piece.

Please can I help you (I know you are Japanese) but it would be so much better with better spelling...

why wount you speek to me??? (Why won't you speak to me?)
why wount i call??? (Why won't I call?)
my mind is in a wounder. (wonder)
and coverd by fogg.. (covered in fog.)
why cant i be strong?? (can't I)
and stand for what i please.
only to get broken down,
and crying on my knees.
lonelyness fades me... (Loneliness)
and i bgain to cover..  (I begin)
i gradually disapeare  (disappear)
into whats not me. (what’s)
long lasting life.
lost by sea. (lost at sea)

But really this is a good write. I love it.
Good on you Kumiko.

Al-x-

yha it is good

very good and I mailed you again by the way ok :)  

hehehe ok

The metaphor of the sea and isolation is perfect. This may be only my opinion but I would try to see  if any other words might replace one or more of the "why". 3 of your first 5 sentences start with.  I find that repetition should be done with care so  not to lose the impact of the word.

what does that mean???