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Broken
She delights in the most improbable.
like breaking her crayons 🖍 to hear the pop.
a testament to the strength she’s developed in 967 days
But when she’s done
So are they
She wants no part of the tattered ones
Dutiful father.
I pick them up
Not able to teach her
just yet
that the tattered ones
paint the best stories.
Their armor easily
And willing shed to provide brilliant texture and contrast
I’ll try to teach her to love
the broken ones
Even as they grow smaller and smaller
Speckled with hubris and laughter
Tears
Love
And the hope
Of yesterday’s
yellow sunshine
And rain
Green grass.
birds shaped like m’s
And clouds made the same way.
crooked windows
And tilted doors
I’ll tell her
Listen to their stories precious one
so that you may know yours.
Written by
LobodeSanPedro
Published 27th Aug 2019
| Edited 26th Aug 2020
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Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 10:40am
I came very close to tears in the fifth stanza. You made me feel something... You're the master at expressing in words the precious things you experience in life and the poetry you hold close to your heart. Beautiful poem. I miss you, brotha.
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Re: Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 1:57pm
Thank you for kind words Brotha. I’m glad you found it to be a moving piece.
I’ve been so busy with grad school, that I feared I’d forgotten what it is to simply write ...
... I also loved your take on the joys of sensual experiences in the Speakeasy forum. I gotta work on getting my lil one more water ready so her Aussie uncle can teach her to surf.
I’ve been so busy with grad school, that I feared I’d forgotten what it is to simply write ...
... I also loved your take on the joys of sensual experiences in the Speakeasy forum. I gotta work on getting my lil one more water ready so her Aussie uncle can teach her to surf.
Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 11:50am
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27th Aug 2019 2:12pm
It’s been a while is right lol ... oddly enough I was in your nabe at least twice in the last two weeks.
I see the Claremont drugstore is still anchoring that corner under the el. I did a park and drive because I had a Mets game one day, Yankees a week later.
... glad you enjoyed the ink. If there’s anybody on this site that knows how to expertly pen the highs and lows of the everyday grind, it is you my friend.
Peace
I see the Claremont drugstore is still anchoring that corner under the el. I did a park and drive because I had a Mets game one day, Yankees a week later.
... glad you enjoyed the ink. If there’s anybody on this site that knows how to expertly pen the highs and lows of the everyday grind, it is you my friend.
Peace
Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 12:31pm
I brought home every crayon we were given in restaurants, and we had a drawer full of all the broken ones.... as they got older, the kids used them for candles and crafts and....
As for the metaphor, my goodness, this is so beautiful! The broken ones willingly shedding their armor.... what an important lesson, so effortlessly conveyed here. It's wonderful to read your words again.
As for the metaphor, my goodness, this is so beautiful! The broken ones willingly shedding their armor.... what an important lesson, so effortlessly conveyed here. It's wonderful to read your words again.
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Re: Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 2:16pm
I’m so glad you found this, and took time to read and comment.
It’s been almost a year since I’ve posted anything, so I’m elated you could relate to my reflections.
Thank you.
It’s been almost a year since I’ve posted anything, so I’m elated you could relate to my reflections.
Thank you.
Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 12:51pm
You're such a wise and wonderful father to notice such things, SanPedro. It's the little things you teach them that will root the deepest. I've raised mine and am on the next generation - he, along with yours, are so important to this planet and the people and animals on it. Love, compassion, and hope over greed must prevail soon.
Beautiful poetry.
Beautiful poetry.
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Re: Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 2:23pm
“Love, hope and compassion over greed ...” you’re so right with these words. The totalitarian mindset that dominates our culture today is dangerous, divisive and destructive ... we all need to plant roses that break through the concrete.
Re. Broken
27th Aug 2019 6:36pm
Time hasn’t ebbed away at any of your artistic talents at all.
#bringbacklobo
We miss you. We miss reading you.
This is a true treasure, dear friend. (:
Yours,
LostGirl
#bringbacklobo
We miss you. We miss reading you.
This is a true treasure, dear friend. (:
Yours,
LostGirl
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Re: Re. Broken
28th Aug 2019 2:01pm
Thank you for reading this and your wonderful comments. Reading your words just now, has brightened my morning.
xoxo
xoxo
Re. Broken
28th Aug 2019 4:27am
And the hope
Of yesterday’s
yellow sunshine
And rain
Green grass.
birds shaped like m’s
And clouds made the same way.
crooked windows
And tilted doors
This is just beautiful and creates such a statement of longing and of inner peace. Really loved this!
Of yesterday’s
yellow sunshine
And rain
Green grass.
birds shaped like m’s
And clouds made the same way.
crooked windows
And tilted doors
This is just beautiful and creates such a statement of longing and of inner peace. Really loved this!
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Re: Re. Broken
28th Aug 2019 2:04pm
My daughters are my greatest source of joy, sometimes just being around them nearly brings me to tears because I can’t believe their mine. Thank you for reading this, but more importantly, taking the time to comment.
Re. Broken
28th Aug 2019 6:42am
A father taking time to show a child the beauty that lies beneath the surface, now that is a thing of beauty
Touching
Masterful
And I'm so glad to have shared this moment with you
Touching
Masterful
And I'm so glad to have shared this moment with you
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Re: Re. Broken
28th Aug 2019 2:07pm
Hey Big Man, thanks for your time and words. For me there’s no greater joy than rediscovering the world through my little one’s eyes; and learning everything I don’t know in conversations with her big sisters.
✌🏾 Peace
✌🏾 Peace
Re. Broken
5th Sep 2019 2:53am
This is a beautiful snapshot of that age where kids love crayons and depicting what they see, they get taken for granted a lot, getting stepped on or melted in the hot sun, I still have my crayons :)
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Re: Re. Broken
17th Sep 2019 5:08am
Thanks for reading this and commenting, it's really appreciated given how worn down I feel of late. It's great that you still love crayons, so do I lol ... they're a everyday part of my life and job.
Cheers.
Cheers.
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18th Sep 2019 4:53am
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9th Nov 2019 3:34am
i love crayons and coloring books. so do my babies that are all grows up. his was fab. and so are you. <3
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Re. Broken
10th Nov 2019 6:43pm
Thank you for this ... your note inspired me on this gray cold day. I’m gonna got out and color a little bit of the world with my little one.
xoxo
xoxo
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16th Nov 2019 5:40am
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Re: Re. Broken
16th Nov 2019 12:07pm
Thank you for your reading this piece and your generous comments. Your words warmed me in what was a very tumultuous week whereby I saw just how devalued the broken ones are, and in the same light, how undervalued those who teach broken hearts are.