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UP AND DOWN, UP AND DOWN
Life, on balance, is hunky-dory.
Would it were an unmedicated story.
Longing simpler, more carefree days
when a favorite song could cure malaise.
Good friends, a guitar, a raucous jam session
was the self-prescribed drug to manage depression.
Existence now stressful, exhausting, complex
lacking in hugs, long kisses, and sex.
Loneliness rampant, solace found in self-pleasure
relationships lost that once were a treasure
Damn it this poem is something most dour
One might think the poet had lost reason’s power
Discard this brush wet with colors too bleak
It is I who impedes the joy that I seek
The heart still pumps, music’s not dead.
Live by the heart get out of the head.
Would it were an unmedicated story.
Longing simpler, more carefree days
when a favorite song could cure malaise.
Good friends, a guitar, a raucous jam session
was the self-prescribed drug to manage depression.
Existence now stressful, exhausting, complex
lacking in hugs, long kisses, and sex.
Loneliness rampant, solace found in self-pleasure
relationships lost that once were a treasure
Damn it this poem is something most dour
One might think the poet had lost reason’s power
Discard this brush wet with colors too bleak
It is I who impedes the joy that I seek
The heart still pumps, music’s not dead.
Live by the heart get out of the head.
Published 13th Aug 2019
| Edited 14th Aug 2019
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feels relatable -- caught my attention right away & kept me reading & intrigued
..appreciate this awesome spill mister <3
..appreciate this awesome spill mister <3
13th Aug 2019 9:22pm
Thank you so much, Umm. I am glad you liked the piece and that it held you attention. I love your profile pic. What's your horses name? 🤓🙏
13th Aug 2019 10:28pm
I wish I was wordy enough to pay a proper response, but all I can say is, TRUTH! Being an old soul too, I hate this era.🙄
13th Aug 2019 10:33pm
13th Aug 2019 10:40pm
I truly didn't read it as inner struggle until your comment. I thought it was regarding us all,; the world...together! These times suck!😆
13th Aug 2019 10:46pm
I think it's an inner struggle many of us share. I am glad that you identify with the piece. And you are so right...it does suck pretty bad right now. But there's been worse and there will be much better. I think that, with out hurting others but being kind to all, including ourselves, we will have the happiness we desire.
14th Aug 2019 00:42am
Fantastic portrayal of the trials and tribulations of growing older.
LostGirl
LostGirl
14th Aug 2019 3:04am
Perfect! You've captured the longing for better days gone by; but then given yourself just the right advice in the end!
I miss jam sessions too though....
I miss jam sessions too though....
14th Aug 2019 4:58pm
Thank you, Titanium! It's a hard thing to put past experiences in perspective by not comparing them to to the present. I am trying to continue enjoying the feelings, good vibrations, and lessons learned that were born from those positive experiences and not allow shame, fear, or regret creep in from the bad ones. I love this Dr. Seuss quote, "Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened."
14th Aug 2019 6:16pm
As one who strughles with endings and goodbyes, I need to remind myself of this quote often...
14th Aug 2019 6:32pm
I have always struggled with endings and goodbyes. I use to he quote often when someone dies to remind those that mourn to keep the loved one alive in their memory.
14th Aug 2019 3:29pm
14th Aug 2019 5:01pm
Thank you, Soledad! It feels good to know that someone appreciates the flow of one of my pieces because I strive to make them an enjoyable, engaging read as do you in your magnificent works.
14th Aug 2019 6:00pm
''It is I who impedes the joy that I seek
The heart still pumps, music’s not dead.
Live by the heart get out of the head.''
like an anchor of truth sinking all the way down
The heart still pumps, music’s not dead.
Live by the heart get out of the head.''
like an anchor of truth sinking all the way down
14th Aug 2019 6:11pm
What a beautiful comment, Naajir! I got a little choked up. Thank you!
14th Aug 2019 6:12pm
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15th Aug 2019 5:04pm
Thank you, Serenity Song! Your profile name brings me piece and compels me to explore your work. I'll read some, today.
15th Aug 2019 5:15pm
16th Jul 2020 9:49pm
Really love this one. You can feel the ache and it is beautifully written. But up and down does make me think more of erotica. :)
17th Jul 2020 1:05am
Ir's funny when I noticed your comment I couldn't remember what this piece is about .so I thought the same. I am glad it's not though I inspired myself rereading that last stanza. Thank you for reading this one . Your comments make me happy.
