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Witch
In the deep black unfathomable
where nothing burns of where there is no air,
in the white ashes unreadable
as others cannot see yet still they stare,
in evening’s wicked, winding stir.
A female muse like that without a care.
I have been like her.
I possess, endowed, an evil spree,
insanity, my bent of village spells
on every inhabitant and flea;
my brewing for the vermin with me dwells,
from cavern home the smell’s allure.
A female like that is a mystery.
I have been like her.
A rutted road where dreams awaken,
I scan the scenery to memorize
and see where I am being taken;
the executioner I recognize:
I hear the sounds of chain and spur.
A female like that looks death in the eyes.
I have been like her.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 3rd Aug 2019
| Edited 2nd Oct 2020
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Re. Witch*
3rd Aug 2019 9:16pm
beautiful Jade this is a deeply dark and complex write
I've been like her too...
I really enjoyed this...
love Brenda ❤
I've been like her too...
I really enjoyed this...
love Brenda ❤
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Re: Re. Witch*
3rd Aug 2019 9:57pm
Dear Brenda, how I have missed you!
I’m honored by your words, and humbled by the recommend, immeasurably...
love, Jade ❤️
I’m honored by your words, and humbled by the recommend, immeasurably...
love, Jade ❤️
Re. Witch*
4th Aug 2019 3:16am
This is sublime, you write such great dark poems unabashedly which makes them shine. As I was reading this, I thought of the haunting way Anne Sexton died, and how this could have been a premonition of her death, it's a great glimpse into her mind and your interpretation of it, great entry :)
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Re: Re. Witch*
Thank you, dear sister, for your appreciation with a beautiful insight that I’m joined with through all the time I’ve gotten to know our Anne.
Best of luck to you as well.
With RL gratitude.
Best of luck to you as well.
With RL gratitude.
Re. Witch*
4th Aug 2019 5:28pm
Powerfully evocative in it's detail, more subtly so in it's meter and rhythmic device. I love what PR said about this and I was also very impressed with her entry into this comp.
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Re: Re. Witch*
4th Aug 2019 6:26pm
Ah, you’re referring to Kathy’s piece “Girlfriends” in the competition - yes! I understand why you’re impressed - I RL’d that as well.
Meantime, I thank you for your always receptive thoughts,
Meantime, I thank you for your always receptive thoughts,
Re: Re. Witch*
4th Aug 2019 7:14pm
Oh you're right I was thinking of Heaven_Sent_Kathy. I just began following her works.
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Re. Witch*
I read the title but right away I was taken into a dark place but your description is vivid and beautiful, until I come to the last stanza. It's like you put the reader in a trance, in a slow motion walk.
Excellent write Ms. Jade. Good luck in the comp.
Excellent write Ms. Jade. Good luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. Witch*
Gosh, thank you, Wally, for your good wishes, and for your thoughts and how you were impacted by my piece, and why. Fascinating, even being the poet. I’ve always learned from the reader over the years.
Re. Witch*
5th Aug 2019 5:03am
She had such a beautiful mind (Anne Sexton). You do her honor.
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Re: Re. Witch*
Buddha sister, thank you for the honor of those words. I’m grateful for having been given the opportunity.
Re. Witch*
5th Aug 2019 2:00pm
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Re: Re. Witch*
9th Aug 2019 3:12am
Ethan, thank you so much; your words have left their imprint on my poet’s heart. You know, that sleepwalking feeling you speak of has been mentioned by another commenter here, and I nod a strong affirmative because I felt as if in a trance as the poem grew with each stanza. I figured out how & why once I published & entered the write.
With my best, Ethan.
Jade
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With my best, Ethan.
Jade
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Re: Re. Witch*
Aah Ethan, I couldn’t let this go without revealing how your explanation of the sleepwalking effect aided by the rhyming flow - was the factor I had recognized, and you have my poet’s respect for your all-around conclusion. 👏🏻
Jade
Jade