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another thousand climbs
♪a rhymed, mirrored octet♪
i may have tripped a thousand times,
like eency weency spider,
but i still have some rhymes
(either or either).*
i shall not whine,
though the stir,
at times,
blurs
my chimes,
when occur
life’s bitter wines.
for i am wiser
and still i have some time,
like eency weency spider,
to try another thousand climbs.
© Copyright 2019 July 4
*either (long E) or either (long I)
i may have tripped a thousand times,
like eency weency spider,
but i still have some rhymes
(either or either).*
i shall not whine,
though the stir,
at times,
blurs
my chimes,
when occur
life’s bitter wines.
for i am wiser
and still i have some time,
like eency weency spider,
to try another thousand climbs.
© Copyright 2019 July 4
*either (long E) or either (long I)
Published 7th Jul 2019
Author's Note
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7th Jul 2019 9:07am
7th Jul 2019 5:37pm
Thank you, SweetOblivion.
You're obviously not oblivious to the not-so-obvious structure that has engaged me.
Much appreciated.
Sincerely
cab
You're obviously not oblivious to the not-so-obvious structure that has engaged me.
Much appreciated.
Sincerely
cab
7th Jul 2019 5:52pm
7th Jul 2019 5:54pm
7th Jul 2019 11:46am
7th Jul 2019 5:44pm
Thanks, Ahavati.
Your visit, your like, and your comment are like three stars in a lonely sky.
The visuals help my words say more than [w]ordsworth!
Sincerely
cab
Your visit, your like, and your comment are like three stars in a lonely sky.
The visuals help my words say more than [w]ordsworth!
Sincerely
cab
7th Jul 2019 3:54pm
I picture you looking across and watching a "spider" then in your clever wit, and poetic skill devising a message of endurance. Very well done!
7th Jul 2019 5:52pm
Thank you, TIG: you understand the typical processes, as a processor yourself!
This one was inspired by a visual poetry competition entitled "determination." I automatically thought "eency weency spider," and the rest just flowed.
The final structure is an octet, a form that has proliferated my pages for the past month or so.
Hint: I am currently hosting an octet competition. You could take a look and see what entries have been coming in, as a means of opening your eyes to yet another form of poetry.
Sincerely
cab
This one was inspired by a visual poetry competition entitled "determination." I automatically thought "eency weency spider," and the rest just flowed.
The final structure is an octet, a form that has proliferated my pages for the past month or so.
Hint: I am currently hosting an octet competition. You could take a look and see what entries have been coming in, as a means of opening your eyes to yet another form of poetry.
Sincerely
cab
7th Jul 2019 9:23pm
