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Sunset In Highgate Wood
streams of sunlight rest in the trees
peeping out from behind ancient branches
a mysterious glow that paints the grass
before ebbing away
a summer mist
another sunset
peeping out from behind ancient branches
a mysterious glow that paints the grass
before ebbing away
a summer mist
another sunset
Published 3rd Jul 2019
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3rd Jul 2019 11:17pm
First, I love the imagery of this. I am very familiar with that area and remember it fondly. In regards to honest critique, I had a few thoughts:
streams of sunlight rest in the trees
How about continuing the streams metaphor by saying
streams of sunlight flow through the trees
weaving between ancient branches
a mysterious glow that paints the grass
before ebbing away
a summer mist
another sunset
It's fine as it is, the imagery is there. I just had the above thoughts when reading it.
streams of sunlight rest in the trees
How about continuing the streams metaphor by saying
streams of sunlight flow through the trees
weaving between ancient branches
a mysterious glow that paints the grass
before ebbing away
a summer mist
another sunset
It's fine as it is, the imagery is there. I just had the above thoughts when reading it.
4th Jul 2019 00:10am
Amazing, thanks very much. I had no idea you knew Highgate. Just moved a mile away, to East Finchley!
4th Jul 2019 00:30am
5th Jul 2019 00:06am
