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Excursion
Was it
one
two
three day outing?
He can't remember;
his thinning memory betrays him...
It, surely, was a group outing
- that photo proved it -
a photo he does not possess,
a photo he, certainly, had seen
a long time ago...
Summertime
in bathing suit
seated on a beach chair
perhaps, at a near by island
surrounded by
three, or four, or five girls...
Who were they?
Neighborhood friends?
Classmates?
But, what high school from?
For his life, he cannot conclude...
One was combing his hair
One, or two manicuring his extended fingers
The remaining
- knees deep in the sand -
pedicuring his shy toe nails;
that much, he remembers clearly...
Pose?
Staged photo shootout?
A game of awkward adolescent eroticisms?
Fading memory of a photo,
or, of the moment?...
one
two
three day outing?
He can't remember;
his thinning memory betrays him...
It, surely, was a group outing
- that photo proved it -
a photo he does not possess,
a photo he, certainly, had seen
a long time ago...
Summertime
in bathing suit
seated on a beach chair
perhaps, at a near by island
surrounded by
three, or four, or five girls...
Who were they?
Neighborhood friends?
Classmates?
But, what high school from?
For his life, he cannot conclude...
One was combing his hair
One, or two manicuring his extended fingers
The remaining
- knees deep in the sand -
pedicuring his shy toe nails;
that much, he remembers clearly...
Pose?
Staged photo shootout?
A game of awkward adolescent eroticisms?
Fading memory of a photo,
or, of the moment?...
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Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 1:31pm
great write dearest Takis
a moment is beautiful
sometimes that's all we have...
love Brenda ❤
a moment is beautiful
sometimes that's all we have...
love Brenda ❤
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Re: Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 2:52pm
Thank you, dear Brenda!
But when the moment escapes memory,
its beauty becomes a nestless bird...
But when the moment escapes memory,
its beauty becomes a nestless bird...
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Re: Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 3:02pm
Delightful snapshots, dear Hershey,
are the ones displayed in your "Summer Lovin" album...
In my poem's case, you have a silly character incapable of even
reconstructing a memory, because he, simply, was not "Being There"...
are the ones displayed in your "Summer Lovin" album...
In my poem's case, you have a silly character incapable of even
reconstructing a memory, because he, simply, was not "Being There"...
Anonymous
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24th Jun 2019 4:23pm
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Re: Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 6:24pm
I used "Being There", (in quotation marks),
in reference to Heidegger's concept of Dasein,
mostly translated in English as being there - as presence in (with) the world.
(One can only acknowledge presence or absence, nothing in between...:))
in reference to Heidegger's concept of Dasein,
mostly translated in English as being there - as presence in (with) the world.
(One can only acknowledge presence or absence, nothing in between...:))
Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 4:30pm
Wat mesmerizes me each time is the characterization of spacetime n characters themselves charted out is such clarity ..in all scenic details n depths of memories lostb or still held..whatever you needed to say flashes about in style n in stark impressionism ..inspite of all your pithy expressionism..Bravo dear adored poet ..n best fr the comp! :)
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Re: Re. Excursion
25th Jun 2019 4:19am
Thank you, dear Uma, for your generous comment!
(For a smile's sake, caught between impressionism and expressionism, is really
living dangerously...:))
(For a smile's sake, caught between impressionism and expressionism, is really
living dangerously...:))
Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 4:49pm
It's amazing how the mind retains certain information from the past, sometimes it blurs within the lines of reality and perception. I love how you presented the subject sort of auto focused at one or two things while the rest is just vignette in this poem. Nicely done as you always do with your work.
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Re: Re. Excursion
25th Jun 2019 4:22am
Re. Excursion
24th Jun 2019 5:20pm
a fine example, Tak, that is
a mind forever bare
of any trace of memory
for it was anywhere but ''there''..
a mind forever bare
of any trace of memory
for it was anywhere but ''there''..
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Re: Re. Excursion
25th Jun 2019 4:24am
Re. Excursion
25th Jun 2019 12:46pm
Re. Excursion
27th Jun 2019 1:44am
you surely know how to rip breaths away,
perfect example:
"Fading memory of a photo,
or, of the moment?...""
jees My Takis, all those
seemingly less important portions
of lived moment... are exactly
those we fight so hard to keep in
our memoirs of intimate fidelity
those little instances between
sh**!
Takis, you got me
perfect example:
"Fading memory of a photo,
or, of the moment?...""
jees My Takis, all those
seemingly less important portions
of lived moment... are exactly
those we fight so hard to keep in
our memoirs of intimate fidelity
those little instances between
sh**!
Takis, you got me
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