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Euphoria🎈
Euphoria filled the balloon
That floated above Forest Lawn.
Appeared bright red like a cartoon;
O, where had the other ones gone?
There never were any in red.
Euphoria filled the balloon,
It waved to the graves of the dead
On such a fair day before June.
A growing breeze, and very soon,
From the chapel the people came.
Euphoria filled the balloon,
It wondered if they felt the same.
They all gathered in the fresh air
With children in ribbons’ festoon,
And waving with wind in their hair.
Euphoria filled the balloon!
Published 31st May 2019
Author's Note
...Instead of filled with helium.
( just came to me out of the blue... where else )
( just came to me out of the blue... where else )
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31st May 2019 4:31am
Reading carefully, for the undercurrent of meaning, it strikes me as mournful, the contrast of the balloon floating on a bright day over the silent, forgotten graves, quite an image.
Daniel
Daniel
Thank you, Daniel. I appreciate you striving to give me your thoughts on this ink.
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
31st May 2019 4:46am
Brava Jadey! To me the balloon represents the soul of the deceased freed from the gravitational pull of this existence. No longer weighed down by sickness and all the cares of life. Thanks for a wonderful ponder.
1st Jun 2019 1:50am
You’re very welcome, Bob, and thank /you/ my friend. Well done.
And with how differently others might feel, I’m adding the following:
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
And with how differently others might feel, I’m adding the following:
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
1st Jun 2019 2:24am
31st May 2019 6:43am
The metaphor could be used for so many things. The pairings for me hit the opposites: the high atmosphere with the balloon and the graves down in the dirt.
The conclusion then leads me to an old Santana song, “Let The Children Play”.
The conclusion then leads me to an old Santana song, “Let The Children Play”.
Why thank you, Jazz sir, I’m glad to see you stopping by for a read.
I’m fascinated by the different impressions the readers have. All of them just as compelling, each to the other.
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
I’m fascinated by the different impressions the readers have. All of them just as compelling, each to the other.
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
31st May 2019 10:05am
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1st Jun 2019 2:02am
31st May 2019 10:52am
The written form here brought to mind a rondel form poem I wrote many years ago. A very similar pattern, originating from French lyrical poetry.
The best writing is more often the "out of the blue" kind.
The best writing is more often the "out of the blue" kind.
1st Jun 2019 2:10am
Thank you so much, Magdalena, for the read, and for such thoughtful words.
Yes, I enjoy doing rondel poetry. I’ve just recently begun writing & publishing the enjoyable Catena Rondo form, and it’s been almost a year since I started writing the Quatern ( which ‘Euphoria’ is ).
Jade🎈
Yes, I enjoy doing rondel poetry. I’ve just recently begun writing & publishing the enjoyable Catena Rondo form, and it’s been almost a year since I started writing the Quatern ( which ‘Euphoria’ is ).
Jade🎈
Anonymous
- Edited 8th May 2020 8:45pm
31st May 2019 11:30am
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1st Jun 2019 2:14am
Such a touching expression in tribute of the ink, dearest hrshy, with my gracious thanks.
Jade🎈
Jade🎈
31st May 2019 5:49pm
Love the innovative imagery. I agree with Daniel's comment - mournful yet flying free of this world's heavyness.
1st Jun 2019 2:19am
With respect & thanks, always, my friend, for the read, and sharing your thoughts with me about what this ink shows you.
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
Each reader gleans their own unique version; for there is no right or wrong take strictly.
Jade🎈
