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dry
eyes won't
stay open
won't read
a book
but manage
to linger
on computer
and phone
until the
retina burns
corneas sting
lids closed
stay open
won't read
a book
but manage
to linger
on computer
and phone
until the
retina burns
corneas sting
lids closed
Published 26th May 2019
Author's Note
For the competition - last minute entry - I just wrote it.
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- Edited 8th May 2020 8:45pm
26th May 2019 4:26am
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26th May 2019 9:14pm
Hahaha - cute! I work in an Ophthalmologist office, so it's kinda been on my mind. :)
26th May 2019 4:44pm
Hm. Economy of words can offer a clean expression. Hope you do well in the comp.
26th May 2019 9:16pm
:) thanks DC! Not considering the win so much as the ability to think on my feet. It's a bit clean (and dry) compared to the other entries, I guess the results will speak for themselves!
26th May 2019 11:17pm
Pretty on the ball for a "just wrote it" comp entry. Clear and succinct; nicely done. And welcome to DUP, Josh.
27th May 2019 00:46am
