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lonely midnights
the switchblade in your smile was always a warning
you were armed to slice and eviscerate with nothing but words
you never were so cruel as you were with your mouth
you zeroed in on my every weakness real or perceived
always on the attack, lest I question you about your mistresses
the lies in your eyes told me everything I needed to know
the how and why of it was a mystery to me weren't we enough?
in your mean days, you would set me up for an argument
and I played into it defending myself
until finally, you would storm out
it was always your intention to leave
you just wanted me to give you an excuse
one day I wouldn't argue...you didn't know what to do
so you sat there and retreated into the dark
I covet your darkness...you wear it like midnights
nothing touches you in the void, where you are perfectly at home
it's so cold in this perfect isolation I can't reach you
so I cry alone at the perimeter you've set
and wait for you to come back to me
now when you attack in anger I can't be hurt
understanding your brokenness I let you go a cutting
in the onyx twilight, we are forever alone together
bleeding eternally
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Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 5:34am
Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 5:36am
thank you dearest Tim I appreciate the love...this was a past relationship so alas forever alone didn't happen gratefully...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 7:21am
Vivid, clear voice which carries a dirge of vulnerable emotions. Just a beautiful proportion of elements. Some lines made me blink. Utterly inspired write. Very impressed Brenda.
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 7:22am
thank you graciously dearest Daniel for the beautiful comment you made me smile...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
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24th May 2019 9:26am
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24th May 2019 2:21pm
Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 9:29am
Forever alone... No one person should hold such power, Crim. I am happy your last assessment in this poem didnt ring as a bad prophecy! No one deserves that kind of loneliness. nice spill, as always!
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 2:24pm
thank you dearest Babydoll for your insight no it didn't... this was about a past relationship thankfully... I thought I would be with them forever alone together...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 2:29pm
thank you graciously dearest HF yes this one is no longer quite as devastatingly painful as it once was...I can write about now...you highlighted a portion I want to correct lol I'm going to take out the and of that last line... it was bothering me last night darn it well, in any case, thank you...
I deeply appreciate you HF ❤
I deeply appreciate you HF ❤
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 3:13pm
Re. lonely midnights
Anonymous
24th May 2019 4:24pm
"forever alone together..." Sounds like the state of humanity. Always seeking connection but stuck in our isolated little skins. This reads of that push/pull experience that drives me half mad. But you are a Dark Angel...Midnight should be no stranger to you, yes? I love you, beautiful
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 4:25pm
thank you beautiful Willow for your wonderful insight on this write... no while this is a past relationship midnight is no stranger...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹💕🌹💕
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹💕🌹💕
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24th May 2019 4:46pm
Re. lonely midnights
24th May 2019 10:21pm
"one day I wouldn't argue...you didn't know what to do"
... nothing like not playing the game any more to pull the rug from under a psycho ...
... nothing like not playing the game any more to pull the rug from under a psycho ...
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 11:39pm
thank you graciously dearest Josh so true I was finally hip to his game and didn't play anymore...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 10:22am
That first line cuts like a switchblade, too.
Incredibly painful to love a person like this, whom "nothing touches you in the void, where you are perfectly at home"
All the many facets of this kind of connection are so vivid here, I really truly felt the pain in this one.
Incredibly painful to love a person like this, whom "nothing touches you in the void, where you are perfectly at home"
All the many facets of this kind of connection are so vivid here, I really truly felt the pain in this one.
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 11:40pm
thank you graciously dearest poet for feeling this so deeply I appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 12:38pm
"it's so cold in this perfect isolation I can't reach you
so I cry alone at the perimeter you've set
and wait for you to come back to me"
When will we ever learn?! The whole poem is spot on.
so I cry alone at the perimeter you've set
and wait for you to come back to me"
When will we ever learn?! The whole poem is spot on.
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 11:41pm
thank you graciously beautiful poetess it took me awhile to learn... I appreciate your thoughts deeply...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 6:16pm
When away from your writing, there's soul food when I return, even the painful stuff. I felt this stinger. Damn powerful last stanza. Hugs💙
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
25th May 2019 6:18pm
thank you graciously beautiful Pandora yes this was one of my most painful relationships and hardest to get over inspite of everything I didn't want to let go... I'm happy to see you back I missed you ❤
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
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Re: Re. lonely midnights
14th Oct 2019 10:56pm
thank you graciously beautiful Sweet One...I deeply appreciate the love on this write...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹