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High Maintenance
She was a bit like drinking very expensive water
when I have always preferred wine
If I overheard her talking about someone
I naturally assumed it was me
and ten times out of ten
it was her complaining again
In the event of us attempting to kill each other
I knew we would need separate ambulances
to stop either of us finishing the job
en-route to the emergency room
She always wanted first lick of an ice cream
but she was never willing to hold the cone herself
Her world was like a garden run wild
if things went wrong she would blame the plants
after all they had chosen where to grow
so it was their fault not hers
It was cool for her to read all my mails
but I only ever read hers the once
Some people think they can run through flames
and never get burned
She was playing dice with the universe
and she always expected snake eyes to come up
every fucking time
just one more disappointment
for us both
.....Next!
Published 4th Jan 2010
| Edited 28th Mar 2016
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Anonymous
4th Jan 2010 6:04pm
Witty and also sad in a subtle kind of way. As per usual, each idea is clearly delineated, and, whilst the verse is refreshingly free from rigid structure, it still seems well organised and considered.
Anonymous
5th Jan 2010 5:48am
full of deep feeling inspite of its apparent nonchalance, loved it A.
5th Jan 2010 11:56am
I think calculating is the best word to describe the other half of that particular relationship - thanks for the comment, Jack.
5th Jan 2010 12:16pm
Thanks Priya - nonchalance is a lovely word isn't it - there's a real roll off the tongue there!
9th Jan 2010 00:55am
I have an ex like that, it's almost like you've written his character profile.
Nice work, I like the undertone of...disdain, maybe?
- T.
Nice work, I like the undertone of...disdain, maybe?
- T.
9th Jan 2010 9:08am
I had hoped it was full on scorn, Tashaaa -- but all water under the bridge now anyway. Thank you for taking the trouble to comment.
