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WHEN IT RAINS IT POURS
From my eyes as I see through the raindrops as they hit upon the ground dancing like tears from the skies I ponder as I wonder through the very deepness, which is were the silents of my darkness of broken tears hide beneath the depth of my soul of my hurt and pain were my misery holds my deepest shredded memories of love lost and love gone.
But yet as I voyage deeper into the dimensions of my unseen thoughts and illusions I remember the viciousness and the gripping feelings of my spiritual soul, being scatted through the darkness that creeps through my mind for when it rains it pours like a flash flood running through my most deepest thoughts.
Reminding me it is always quiet before the real storm for each day is a struggle for everyday is a fight for my life for every waking moment screams, from deep down inside of my depth and deepness each time when darkness falls and the rain pours from the skies as they open up the haunting in me with the unseen scars of when it rains it pours.
But yet as I voyage deeper into the dimensions of my unseen thoughts and illusions I remember the viciousness and the gripping feelings of my spiritual soul, being scatted through the darkness that creeps through my mind for when it rains it pours like a flash flood running through my most deepest thoughts.
Reminding me it is always quiet before the real storm for each day is a struggle for everyday is a fight for my life for every waking moment screams, from deep down inside of my depth and deepness each time when darkness falls and the rain pours from the skies as they open up the haunting in me with the unseen scars of when it rains it pours.
Published 7th May 2019
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when darkness falls and comes followed by the rain
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7th May 2019 1:38pm
7th May 2019 2:17pm
7th May 2019 11:14pm
I like the prose presentation, and the jackhammer intent, i think maybe some of the repeated words could be removed, not the title words, there repetitions work well, but i think some of the others, if changed, would add even more colour to the piece, i enjoyed the read.
8th May 2019 10:22am
thank you for your comment sometimes when i write my mind moves faster than my hand but i would have to agree with your advice of removing some of the words i appreciate your thoughts on my work
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