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Crafting a Damn Poem
Even the little words are reluctant
to heel in neatly, do what they’re told
greased with some spittle, cleverly constant
sneaking discretely they anchor their hold
brazen with bottle, never repentant
creeping concretely they’re breaking my mould
pressing the throttle, smiling expectant
almost completely my focus is rolled …
… but restless to whittle words that are extant
lifting astutely the meaning they polled
eyeing the prattle, shooting the mutants
slow, resolutely, the film-rights are sold
then flicking the dottle, shifting disputants
writing minutely I press for the gold.
Published 27th Apr 2019
| Edited 9th Mar 2024
Author's Note
NaPo Day-27 contribution. ‘Polled’ as in lopped off, cut off (a top of a tree). ‘Dottle’ is the plug of tobacco left at the bottom of a pipe after it has been smoked.
(photo credit: Joshua Bond)
(photo credit: Joshua Bond)
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27th Apr 2019 1:12pm
Liked your 'mid' rhymes ... very clever and pleasurable to read. (Must steal, must steal, must steal...).
27th Apr 2019 1:46pm
27th Apr 2019 1:36pm
True craftmanship. Bet you could build a sturdy library and fill it beautiful and meaning poems.
WAIT!, you already have.
WAIT!, you already have.
27th Apr 2019 1:51pm
Thank you A_t for the compliment. I'm fortunate enough to have a small library of poetry books but now it's spilling over out of its designated space pushing against my ethics & technology section. Good idea that DUP can give me some extended space. :))
27th Apr 2019 1:45pm
27th Apr 2019 1:53pm
Thank you Summer again for reading and commenting. Never has my rhyming dictionary been so much used for just one poem. :))
Wonderfully metaphoric and very inspiring, Josh! It captured the essence of NaPo perfectly!
27th Apr 2019 1:55pm
Anonymous
27th Apr 2019 3:11pm
I enjoyed reading this. You are gifted and this is well penned. :)
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27th Apr 2019 10:00pm
27th Apr 2019 10:04pm
Thank you Crow. I think this NaPo month is squeezing out of me stuff I didn't realise was there - which I guess is the whole point of it. Never have I used my rhyming dictionary so extensively for just one poem. :))
Anonymous
29th Apr 2019 4:15pm
Man, this is a thing of beauty. I"m struggling with my muse like crazy. I want words & she's getting lazy. I expect when this challenge is over she's gonna leave me high & dry for a while. Much enjoyed this one!!
29th Apr 2019 6:36pm
Thank you Willow. I'm "in discussion" with my muse currently over a 'Day-31' posting entitled "Muse's Post-NaPo-2019 De-Brief". She might have something to say on the matter :))
