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We're Learning
He's learning my soul's intricate compass
Arms outstretched
Gently bids shelter to pain and numbness
Peering intently into beloved blue irises
My complexities searched over
Capturing still frames of all kept silenced
Hands skim the jagged roadmap of scars
Rendering my ugly, his beauty
Perfection upon a battlefield of wars
In my wellspring of hurt, tears taking form
He catches each burden to drop
From speckled hazels, his own are torn
He lays with me upon my bed of darkness
Anchors his head to my heart
As I'm learning, he's my sweetest catharsis
Written by
PandoraUnleashed
Published 25th Apr 2019
| Edited 26th Apr 2019
Author's Note
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Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 8:08pm
What a delightfully sweet and loving poem...
how wonderful you both are still learning
A lovely tribute to a wonderful kinship...
The piece is almost perfect,
except for one little matter...
In S1, Li...there is a tiny error...
"Souls" needs an apostrophe...to indicate it is possessive... (my *soul's* intricate compass)
No doubt a slip of the finger, a typo, and fortunately...easily remedied...
Hope you don't mind the little critique...hope it has been helpful... hugs, Ely
how wonderful you both are still learning
A lovely tribute to a wonderful kinship...
The piece is almost perfect,
except for one little matter...
In S1, Li...there is a tiny error...
"Souls" needs an apostrophe...to indicate it is possessive... (my *soul's* intricate compass)
No doubt a slip of the finger, a typo, and fortunately...easily remedied...
Hope you don't mind the little critique...hope it has been helpful... hugs, Ely
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Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:34am
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25th Apr 2019 8:13pm
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26th Apr 2019 6:35am
Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 7:12am
I’m not sure I’m Mr. Erotica on any block but thanks for the sentiment
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Re: Re. We're Learning
27th Apr 2019 7:54am
Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 8:30pm
Exquisite spill
from chosen pic
to the onset, throughout and end.
Very very tender strong write
from chosen pic
to the onset, throughout and end.
Very very tender strong write
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Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:38am
Thank you for the kindness, sweet one! I love the new name. I'm surprised it doesn't have sky in it though.🤔 * giggles *
It's a priority to check you out tomorrow...my goodness, I've been slipping!
It's a priority to check you out tomorrow...my goodness, I've been slipping!
Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 8:32pm
The image of catching the burden is so powerful. The emotion and reverence in this poem is top-notch. Nicely done!
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Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:39am
Thank you, dear T. You used the word reverence.😍 You know I'm a word nerd!
I know you posted something which I'll see tomorrow... I'm so lagging..sigh!
I know you posted something which I'll see tomorrow... I'm so lagging..sigh!
Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 8:45pm
Beautiful words Pandora. Your fluid description of passion and the realness of the emotion let's me escape to a happy place in my head as I read it.
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Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:42am
I can't think of a more deserving person to feel it. I'm blessed by such a compliment, my cleverly poetic friend.♡
Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 9:47pm
Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:40am
Re. We're Learning
25th Apr 2019 10:03pm
Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:43am
As always, such a dear! Thank you!♡
More catching up to do with you & everyone tomorrow..so behind. Sorry!!
More catching up to do with you & everyone tomorrow..so behind. Sorry!!
Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 3:05am
sweet loving write your light from within shows through in theses words
nice work
nice work
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Re: Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 6:44am
I'm sure blessed with him right now! Thank you..I'm coming your way tomorrow;)
Re. We're Learning
26th Apr 2019 11:35am
Love those last lines. Always learning, though that's not always a bad thing. Great ink, bud 😋
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Re: Re. We're Learning
27th Apr 2019 7:55am
Thank you for humbling me always. You're definitely one who knows the struggle.🙏
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Re: Re. We're Learning
27th Apr 2019 7:57am
I could hug you, Bender! Your message alone made me smile. Thank you for coming here too!♡
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2019 5:45am
8th May 2019 12:59pm
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17th May 2019 4:53am