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What I Could Do
I could cry you a river
and drown the words you say
tie them to stones
toss them away
I could carve at my skin
with a razor blade
write down my feelings
to make sure they stayed
I could run far away
leave your name in the dust
but I can’t forget you
you broke my trust
I could drive to the bridge
wave goodbye
leave this all behind
and finally fly
I could believe
you’d take it all back
but it’s easier to die
let it all fade to black
and drown the words you say
tie them to stones
toss them away
I could carve at my skin
with a razor blade
write down my feelings
to make sure they stayed
I could run far away
leave your name in the dust
but I can’t forget you
you broke my trust
I could drive to the bridge
wave goodbye
leave this all behind
and finally fly
I could believe
you’d take it all back
but it’s easier to die
let it all fade to black
Published 18th Apr 2019
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18th Apr 2019 3:38am
This is very well written! It almost sounds like it could be lyrics to a song. I feel the pain and betrayal through your words. Beautifully done.
18th Apr 2019 12:06pm
18th Apr 2019 7:39pm
Glad my pain was felt, I guess it does have a sort of glide and cadence to the words, thanks for commenting!
18th Apr 2019 7:39pm
Maybe I should add a few chords and put it in a minor key then ;) thanks!
18th Apr 2019 4:08am
I agree the rhythm is very good, carries the reader along in a good cadence, especially when read aloud.
As far as content, I think everyone has felt that way at some point - it's something some relent to, and others move past to grow. I pray the latter for you.
As far as content, I think everyone has felt that way at some point - it's something some relent to, and others move past to grow. I pray the latter for you.
18th Apr 2019 7:40pm
18th Apr 2019 7:41pm
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