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The story starts:
Swaying on a street dark and lonely
Under rain, barely in it, very out of it.
I hum along to the songs I keep
For moments like this -
I twisted my hands -
Scraped and bloodied and I tried
To catch
My breath
In the freezing.
I sat down to hold the sobs in,
And old neon lights and dreams taunt me,
Then -
Darkness.
In front of me, blocking glaring
Lights -
He offered a hand -
Sinister smile knowing -
And I took it.
Eyes,
They see something.
Hands,
They could choke me.
The monster,
It must have recognized mine.
He whispered and
Made fun of our deaths,
I walked away
With him -
"What do you want from me,
Where do we go?"*
Published 1st Apr 2019
Author's Note
Poem 1 of 30, NaPoWriMo 2019.
*bury a friend, lyrics by FINNEAS and Billie Eilish - https://youtu.be/HUHC9tYz8ik
Image: royalty free, light
*bury a friend, lyrics by FINNEAS and Billie Eilish - https://youtu.be/HUHC9tYz8ik
Image: royalty free, light
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1st Apr 2019 3:21am
Fabulous offering, positivelydarkone! It's metaphorically suspenseful yet tangibly believable. You have me wondering if this is going to be a series continuing the story.
2nd Apr 2019 8:47am
Thank you, Ahavati! Yes, it will be a series; I'm digging deep and finding forgotten, hidden dark things. I plan to finally put them to light. :)
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1st Apr 2019 7:19am
This is a wonderful start to the NaPo, dear dark sister! And I can tell it’s the kick-off to what will be a series that will have me on the edge of my seat! x
Jadey🐾
Jadey🐾
2nd Apr 2019 8:50am
Thank you, Jadey! I'm trying to be more honest with the darkness this time, interesting, I'm hoping! And hopefully cathartic.
Love and light,
C
Love and light,
C
1st Apr 2019 5:45pm
thepositivelydark,
Like the others, I'm enthralled at how your treatment of a literary series will go during this month, it gives me chills of anticipation. You have it in you, all the best.
Kathy
Like the others, I'm enthralled at how your treatment of a literary series will go during this month, it gives me chills of anticipation. You have it in you, all the best.
Kathy
2nd Apr 2019 8:52am
Thank you, Kathy.
Wow, I really hope I deliver, and send more chills your way. In my head, they want electric - I hope my fingers will cooperate, haha.
Love and light,
tpd
Wow, I really hope I deliver, and send more chills your way. In my head, they want electric - I hope my fingers will cooperate, haha.
Love and light,
tpd
2nd Apr 2019 12:00pm
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2019 00:10am
I know I'm late as heck in commenting, but I just wanted to Thank You for kicking off the compoetition with an intensely engaging write.
"He whispered and
Made fun of our deaths,"
Yikes! I shuddered.
"He whispered and
Made fun of our deaths,"
Yikes! I shuddered.
