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Trained
The train sways
A safer surrogate
Than mother's arms
Trees dance by
Pirouette in parallax
An arborial ballet
Green horizons bashful
Play Peek-a-boo
Behind tall towers
Viewing through dirty
Panes and pains
Needn't highlight misery
Even if you are trained that way.
Published 29th Mar 2019
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29th Mar 2019 7:56pm
By nature,
I am a rebel, but You make this << Trained >> gig sound wonderful and delightful
nice spill
I am a rebel, but You make this << Trained >> gig sound wonderful and delightful
nice spill
29th Mar 2019 8:33pm
31st Mar 2019 6:40pm
Your opening stanza creates a really interesting metaphor in the mind's eye. I love the syllabic flow and construction of the second stanza. Beautiful. You follow through to a terrific message on perspective. We often cannot choose our environment or circumstances, but we can choose how to feel about them. Attitude is practically everything. Great ink.
Daniel
Daniel
31st Mar 2019 9:30pm
Your responses are always so thoughtful and complete. I appreciate the kind thoughts and critique.
4th Apr 2019 2:33am
You're most welcome brother. I just try to connect with the write in some personal way and offer whatever insights into it that occur to me, it's what I would want, so it's what I provide.
