This is a very nice piece, the writing to us should be a little lighter. It's kind of dark and sorta blends on this background. But your piece is tight
Wow! this is wonderful in the manner it reads. Beautiful spill
Perhaps if You chose a lighter font color like yellow or white or even pink, increase the font size and maybe bold it the text might stand out better. (I worked in the printing business for 30+ years and know some tricks to cause the "Reverses" to stand-out more.)
This is so tastefully and elegantly written. I’ve been reading your other work and what a force of positive power you emit in your pieces. Utterly delightful. I look forward to reading more and learning from you. H🌷