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the Voyager The Joker
The plates of the earth start shifting
the moon pulls harder at the ocean
your boat starts lifting .
You stare at the china blue
porcelain skies
the flocculent clouds are forming
profound
smoked
stationary
pervious
ambiguous
deceased eyes .
Your voyaging vessel
is tearing through the bottomless
clandestine
conspiring , commodity
of drowning choked death .
Collossal ice bergs obscure your
vitamin starved vision
as the insect
parasitic type life
gnaws into your ship mates decomposing skull
making a final incision .
If your lucky
you might reach your destination
with gangerous limbs
and indigent thoughts
but hey !
what the hell you made it
at least your ego
wasn't demoted to nought .
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Published 2nd Jan 2010
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22nd Jul 2011 6:16pm
If I'm absolutely honest about this poem then I would say that I liked it BUT... the ending was a bit of a disappointment for me. I was being taken on this great journey, expecting some great truth to be revealed to me, and in the end it was all well... a bit of a joke! Was that the point of the poem?
If so, then I guess the poem is utter brilliance. It definitely had me captivated early on, with some beautiful, descriptive lyricism, and I suppose if you goal was to achieve what you did with me then it was done very well.
I was curious about the title, I have to assume that you very much mean "Voyager" and not "voyage" (since you capitalize it).
Anyway... good work.
If so, then I guess the poem is utter brilliance. It definitely had me captivated early on, with some beautiful, descriptive lyricism, and I suppose if you goal was to achieve what you did with me then it was done very well.
I was curious about the title, I have to assume that you very much mean "Voyager" and not "voyage" (since you capitalize it).
Anyway... good work.
26th Jul 2011 4:27am
ha ha ha well it is Voyager and as for the meaning yes it is a joke hence the joker as it's a journey to nowhere thanks for your comment again , I do wish all the same maybe you picked some of my better work to read ha ha ha ha
26th Jul 2011 1:23pm
I didn't pick it per se, it was picked for me, but your request is received and understood. :)
Nice work here! :)
Nice work here! :)
