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favourite season...
trees hanging bare
leaves strewn recklessly
scattered upon the mourning ground
at the mercy of the winds
fracturing their existence
I’m cold
showers and storms give way
to a gust of sunlight
fragrance of hope floats in
on morning breeze
and his warmth gently unfolds
upon the day
the light comes easy now
taking me to a place
beyond comprehension
enchanted by rustling whispers
irretrievable moments play across my lips
letting life in, abandoning the cold
stitched to horizons in unyielding thread
skies imbued in depthless peace
never to breathe another fleeting moment
knowing that this love exists
outside of time
in every single season
leaves strewn recklessly
scattered upon the mourning ground
at the mercy of the winds
fracturing their existence
I’m cold
showers and storms give way
to a gust of sunlight
fragrance of hope floats in
on morning breeze
and his warmth gently unfolds
upon the day
the light comes easy now
taking me to a place
beyond comprehension
enchanted by rustling whispers
irretrievable moments play across my lips
letting life in, abandoning the cold
stitched to horizons in unyielding thread
skies imbued in depthless peace
never to breathe another fleeting moment
knowing that this love exists
outside of time
in every single season
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Re. favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 1:50am
Beautiful as ever Sophie, spring brings with her a fresh start, to grow something wonderful out of a tiny seed.
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18th Mar 2019 1:22pm
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18th Mar 2019 1:42pm
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18th Mar 2019 1:48pm
favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 2:21am
Hi, sophie_ericson
Your poem is seasoned with the fragrance of spring. Its warmth is just in time to dissipate the frosty grip of its archenemy.
fragrance of hope floats in
on morning breeze
and his warmth gently unfolds
upon the day
encapsulates beautiful thoughts of a more winsome climate. The personification makes Mr Spring bigger than life, especially when one has a...
...knowing that (t)his love exists
outside of time
Your poem is seasoned with the fragrance of spring. Its warmth is just in time to dissipate the frosty grip of its archenemy.
fragrance of hope floats in
on morning breeze
and his warmth gently unfolds
upon the day
encapsulates beautiful thoughts of a more winsome climate. The personification makes Mr Spring bigger than life, especially when one has a...
...knowing that (t)his love exists
outside of time
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18th Mar 2019 1:50pm
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18th Mar 2019 2:30am
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18th Mar 2019 1:50pm
Re. favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 3:11am
The comments above are wonderful and focused on the change of seasons into Spring. I can totally see that, but before I read them, what I was reading was the loss of a personal relationship and the aftermath of that. Likely I am projecting my own experience into your write, which is natural and inevitable.
I picture the tree, barren of leaves, as a wounded person, feeling vulnerable. They are mourning a loss but also looking forward with budding hope. It is also natural to anthropomorphize things for us.
Enjoyed feeling this.
Daniel
I picture the tree, barren of leaves, as a wounded person, feeling vulnerable. They are mourning a loss but also looking forward with budding hope. It is also natural to anthropomorphize things for us.
Enjoyed feeling this.
Daniel
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Re: Re. favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 1:56pm
Thanks Daniel, always appreciate your deep insight
Let's focus on the buds... ;)
Let's focus on the buds... ;)
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18th Mar 2019 3:34am
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18th Mar 2019 1:51pm
Re. favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 6:17am
Brava, Dear Sophie! If I were a psychologist I would suggests that my depressed patients read this piece every morning of every day. It's absolutely stunning. It really has the elements of the masters.You make me want to do, be better.
"mourning ground" and "gust of sunlight"....BRILLIANT! <3<3
"mourning ground" and "gust of sunlight"....BRILLIANT! <3<3
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Re: Re. favourite season...
18th Mar 2019 1:52pm
Haha, you'd best stick to the day job Bob - not sure them patients would fare too well. Kidding.
Beautiful comment. Always grateful <3
Beautiful comment. Always grateful <3
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18th Mar 2019 3:27pm
I'm crushed that you say so 😂 I just spent thousands of dollars on a masters in psychology 😁 Kidding!
Once again, beautiful poem! 💓
Once again, beautiful poem! 💓
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18th Mar 2019 1:53pm
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18th Mar 2019 8:07pm
Touching... wonderful... and very vivid. As a nature enthusiast and a sensitive person, it's relatable. Reminds me of some of my own poetry in the way that you relate and express your emotions through nature in analogistic form.
Anyway, nicely done, sophie! I loved it :)
Anyway, nicely done, sophie! I loved it :)
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19th Mar 2019 12:54pm
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Re. favourite season...
25th Mar 2019 2:54pm
Bare trees and strewn leaves, I felt the cold through your unique angle of your eyes and mind...
The scenery of cold season you have depicted is so vividly true. Love the beautiful word choice.
Love
Jasmine
The scenery of cold season you have depicted is so vividly true. Love the beautiful word choice.
Love
Jasmine
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Re. favourite season...
26th Mar 2019 10:15am
This wrapped me up like a great big {{{warmy-hug}}}
So picturesquely expressed!
Jj
So picturesquely expressed!
Jj
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