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And so it repeats...
Shaken!
I will bite my lip til it is pierced.
and through spiderlegs I shall leer...
Sneaking peeks and twitching limbs
You are my game.
Rabid!
Hemic embrace of thorns;
forever I loll in your rimy balm
To force this is not my hearts' intent
but cave into me dear, make it quick!
Shaken!
I have severed my tongue
Sprawl me upon that mattress of moss
Gaping, my eyes streem off porcelien.
You have left me absolutely naught!
I will bite my lip til it is pierced.
and through spiderlegs I shall leer...
Sneaking peeks and twitching limbs
You are my game.
Rabid!
Hemic embrace of thorns;
forever I loll in your rimy balm
To force this is not my hearts' intent
but cave into me dear, make it quick!
Shaken!
I have severed my tongue
Sprawl me upon that mattress of moss
Gaping, my eyes streem off porcelien.
You have left me absolutely naught!
Published 23rd Nov 2011
| Edited 24th Nov 2011
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24th Nov 2011 9:56pm
Carla, your poetry has evolved so much.
you are years ahead of yourself. fair play.
if i had to make a suggestion of change it would be the ellipses before Sneaking, i don't think you need them, however it is obvious that you put a lot of thought into the above poem.
great stuff!
you are years ahead of yourself. fair play.
if i had to make a suggestion of change it would be the ellipses before Sneaking, i don't think you need them, however it is obvious that you put a lot of thought into the above poem.
great stuff!
24th Nov 2011 10:56pm
29th Nov 2011 4:17pm
You're a scary, demonic chick, but that's what you want everyone to think, you poser!
29th Nov 2011 8:28pm
What a surprising first! I've never been called a poser before.
It was never my intent to be scurr you.
As for demonic? No, no. I'm just Teenage Jesus.
It was never my intent to be scurr you.
As for demonic? No, no. I'm just Teenage Jesus.
4th Dec 2011 8:25am
I can't believe that guy had the audacity to even say that. But this is a very good poem congrats.
4th Dec 2011 8:44am
Ah, well after she made fun of me on ten+ poems in one hour it was like taking a sip of afternoon frappé.
Thank you for your kind words :)
Thank you for your kind words :)
2nd Mar 2012 2:56pm
send me a message with some insight to the inspiration to this one if its ok with you.it has me wanting to know.
6th Mar 2012 10:20am
