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make my ears stop ringing
make me safe here
it's the only safety I find
not sure how I'm using capitals
but I shant complain
come back to bed
if you want to
and make me sane
make my ears stop ringing
please.
make me safe here
it's the only safety I find
not sure how I'm using capitals
but I shant complain
come back to bed
if you want to
and make me sane
make my ears stop ringing
please.
Published 19th Nov 2011
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19th Nov 2011 10:04am
21st Nov 2011 8:34pm
19th Nov 2011 2:12pm
ha!
How you can even spell right at that time in the a.m is beyond me.not to mention see straight.
You have a matter of fact style going on with the exception of the line;
not sure how I'm using capitals, which in fairness is still matter of fact but i took it as a kind of secondary thought, figured if it were in italics it might enhance the thought.
anyhoo, fair fkn play.
How you can even spell right at that time in the a.m is beyond me.not to mention see straight.
You have a matter of fact style going on with the exception of the line;
not sure how I'm using capitals, which in fairness is still matter of fact but i took it as a kind of secondary thought, figured if it were in italics it might enhance the thought.
anyhoo, fair fkn play.
21st Nov 2011 8:35pm
Thank you, Eamon - I genuinely never intended it to come off well at all. I was too smashed and using my mobile to particularly care. Drunk poems never hurt, eh?
Anonymous
20th Nov 2011 9:57am
The reference to capitals is almost like breaking the fourth wall between poet and reader. A clever metaphysical device in what is on the whole an effective sensory poem. Thanks for the read, LA.
21st Nov 2011 8:35pm
