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Tender Heart
Dispense your wishful thinking, eager friend,
When daylight seems to never end.
A vow that isn’t pledged has no regrets,
For soon the envied sun will have to set.
Delighting, as you like, that home grown flower,
She’ll call at night, the midnight hour.
Fairest blossom, amongst such blooms,
A hidden love, from darkness looms.
Not absence, keeps you from her tender heart,
Nor beauty, roses have, can pry apart.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 11th Feb 2019
| Edited 1st Mar 2019
Author's Note
For the Deep competition “Poetic Medic #3: Don't Pull The Plug On Me!”, to make a new poem of 35 words from an existing poem of another poet, & 35 words of your own = 70 words total. Hosted by Ahavati & JohnnyBlaze.
•UPDATE: It got the win.
•UPDATE: It got the win.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. Tender Heart
11th Feb 2019 9:37pm
A fine love poem, Jade. They say "absence makes the heart grow fonder." That may well apply here. Love these lines, the content and the rhyme. Beautifully written...
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11th Feb 2019 10:26pm
Thank you, my dear friend. Your interpretive skill always shines through. x
Jadey
Jadey
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11th Feb 2019 10:07pm
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14th Feb 2019 2:24am
This is an amazing poem considering the tight boundaries you were working with, it came out great..
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16th Feb 2019 7:23pm
I agree with Poet'sRevenge. You truly rose to the occasion. It is soulful and elegant.
Daniel
Daniel
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17th Feb 2019 00:54am
Re. Tender Heart
6th Mar 2019 10:08pm
Through this love poem read a heart can mend, both passion and love in a harmonious blend. The wisdom of jade envisions a blooming flower. Your words so strong, where do you draw this power? 'No regrets' you say, what a beautiful thought. For now I know the life thats given is the life we got :)
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Oh my dear Xia, I missed your comment when it first came in. I redress here my oversight, to thank you for your lovely sentiment to my write. To let you know how, for all the years of scribing verse, each year I’ve grown more attuned to the Muse. For, if power is what is gleaned from the association, then truly it’s the Muse by proxy.
Your visit here was insightful. x
Your visit here was insightful. x
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19th Mar 2019 6:43am
Thank you so very much, dear Danny, for your kind & thoughtful express - and for the place of honor on your RL.
Jadey🙏🏻
Jadey🙏🏻