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Emptied
You are the rifle,
And I, the bullet.
With careless words,
and without thought,
You pull the trigger
and fire but one.
I am an empty shell.
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8th Feb 2019 1:26am
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7th Feb 2019 11:21pm
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8th Feb 2019 1:27am
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Anonymous
8th Feb 2019 00:02am
That IS good, Tallen. and bleak(yes, I stole that review from the two people above me, but I would have said it first had I deleted their reviews. Great job, my friend. (I just read The Road, by Cormac McCarthy, and I thought that was bleak...could have saved some time!).
How are you, Buddy?
MZ.
How are you, Buddy?
MZ.
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8th Feb 2019 1:29am
Just somethin' I shared while trying to complete
a spill I began yesterday...........
reading up on Your author: Cormac and will get back to You.
How's that training shit going? I thought maybe if the trainee was taking too long
I might step in and take up the slack.
a spill I began yesterday...........
reading up on Your author: Cormac and will get back to You.
How's that training shit going? I thought maybe if the trainee was taking too long
I might step in and take up the slack.
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Anonymous
8th Feb 2019 3:01am
Actually, she decided to start tomorrow, so I'll let you know. I could use your wacky mind, my friend(other accountants are boooring). Lol.
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8th Feb 2019 3:54am
I might be able to assist -- I've always been good with equations and formulas -- not so much with spacial shit.
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Anonymous
8th Feb 2019 4:11am
You'll be fine, the only thing I know is that 7+7=77, but I just fake the rest. Lol.
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8th Feb 2019 8:48pm
Can we use the number Three in lieu of 7?
I love odd numbers
and 3 is my Favorite ;)
I love odd numbers
and 3 is my Favorite ;)
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Anonymous
9th Feb 2019 2:46am
I suppose we could...I thought 3 was a letter! Damn.
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Anonymous
8th Feb 2019 2:41pm
damn...the gravity of your words..
penetrate...
penetrate...
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8th Feb 2019 8:52pm
Emptied
8th Feb 2019 3:31pm
Powerful beyond bullets and beyond words.
There's a duality: careless, thoughtless words, once spoken -- even "but one" spoken -- cannot be recalled once we "trigger" off our mouths.
There's a duality: careless, thoughtless words, once spoken -- even "but one" spoken -- cannot be recalled once we "trigger" off our mouths.
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Re: Emptied
8th Feb 2019 8:51pm
I came up with this when the verse
James 3:8 (any version works here)
popped up into my brain when I was on FB chatting with one of my Christian Friends.
Appreciate Your thoughtful read and honored for the RL add.
thank You
James 3:8 (any version works here)
popped up into my brain when I was on FB chatting with one of my Christian Friends.
Appreciate Your thoughtful read and honored for the RL add.
thank You
Re: Emptied
10th Feb 2019 5:38am
Obviously, your thoughts were clear enough for me to see the link between the gun/bullet and the tongue/word. Great job.
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26th Feb 2019 6:50pm
Happy You read the spill in the way intended
thank You for the read and kind share
thank You for the read and kind share
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25th Mar 2019 11:49pm