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Sober
I'm standing on the precipice
Feeling so much less than this
Sobriety that I've earned
Some part of me wants to burn it down
Bury myself deep underground
Revoke everything I've learned
Insecurities shooting through
This happiness feels too good to be true
I don't know why I'm so concerned
Breaking free of this dis-ease
My mind is clear, but I'm not pleased
A happy medium I can't discern
All I wanted was normality
And I don't know if it's enough for me
When the demons within return
Days spent in silent contemplation
Wondering if I deserve salvation
Inside me, all my sin burn
And I ache to feel oblivious
Drown it out with an amber kiss
For some release I yearn
So I'm standing on the precipice
Feeling so much less than this
Sobriety that I've earned
© Indie Adams 2011
Feeling so much less than this
Sobriety that I've earned
Some part of me wants to burn it down
Bury myself deep underground
Revoke everything I've learned
Insecurities shooting through
This happiness feels too good to be true
I don't know why I'm so concerned
Breaking free of this dis-ease
My mind is clear, but I'm not pleased
A happy medium I can't discern
All I wanted was normality
And I don't know if it's enough for me
When the demons within return
Days spent in silent contemplation
Wondering if I deserve salvation
Inside me, all my sin burn
And I ache to feel oblivious
Drown it out with an amber kiss
For some release I yearn
So I'm standing on the precipice
Feeling so much less than this
Sobriety that I've earned
© Indie Adams 2011
Published 18th Nov 2011
| Edited 29th Apr 2012
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Being a drinker, i feel exactly what you mean by what youve written.
'Days spent in silent contemplation
Wondering if I deserve salvation
Inside me, all my sin burn '
Absolutely loved this verse though. Its always great when one can be introspective. Seeing and Accepting our denials and understanding exactly that. Albeit, change isnt easy when familiarity is a comfort zone
'Days spent in silent contemplation
Wondering if I deserve salvation
Inside me, all my sin burn '
Absolutely loved this verse though. Its always great when one can be introspective. Seeing and Accepting our denials and understanding exactly that. Albeit, change isnt easy when familiarity is a comfort zone
23rd Nov 2011 8:11am
clever what you have done here, a rhyming couplet with the last line of each stanza rhyming with the last line of each stanza.
you show a good understanding of words and rhyme beyond mine.
great stuff Indie!
shine on!
you show a good understanding of words and rhyme beyond mine.
great stuff Indie!
shine on!
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29th Apr 2012 8:40pm
I pray I make it as far as you beautiful lady..this is a soulful real poem with a lot of heart..peace Crim
