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Faith, in Chains
( uncut version )
When the weather takes a turn
For the worst of how you feel.
Ripped down to bare bones that burn,
Stripped down to your cage of steel.
I’m the lover waiting there,
In the deepest of your pain.
Lets you know your heart I’ll wear,
Locked it with your ball & chain.
Sudden glimpse the underworld,
I furtive meet another.
Brazen crave, the other’s furled,
Of every man his brother.
Gone, my sweet touch while alive,
Feel the claws that open you.
Take the honey from the hive,
Satisfy my bitter brew.
Do you think I’ll change my mind,
Licking tongue, wipe clean the stains.
Pity you? Let me remind,
Owning you, your faith, in chains.
When the weather takes a turn
For the worst of how you feel.
Ripped down to bare bones that burn,
Stripped down to your cage of steel.
I’m the lover waiting there,
In the deepest of your pain.
Lets you know your heart I’ll wear,
Locked it with your ball & chain.
Sudden glimpse the underworld,
I furtive meet another.
Brazen crave, the other’s furled,
Of every man his brother.
Gone, my sweet touch while alive,
Feel the claws that open you.
Take the honey from the hive,
Satisfy my bitter brew.
Do you think I’ll change my mind,
Licking tongue, wipe clean the stains.
Pity you? Let me remind,
Owning you, your faith, in chains.
Published 16th Jan 2019
| Edited 20th Jan 2019
Author's Note
Update: The original is replaced by the “uncut version” from host snugglebuck’s Black Heart competition, which took 1st Place.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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16th Jan 2019 1:52pm
Anonymous
16th Jan 2019 5:10pm
Jadey Tiger,
You're a beautiful poet, my friend, and person.
Really enjoyed that. Great writing.
Love,
Matthew.
You're a beautiful poet, my friend, and person.
Really enjoyed that. Great writing.
Love,
Matthew.
16th Jan 2019 8:07pm
Thanks, puppy. Somehow, I thought this one would just drop from sight, ‘cause the fickle muse can change in & on me by the hour.
16th Jan 2019 6:04pm
My Priestess such vivid, stirring passionate ink. This is truly one of you best inks of all you given us. Very impressive in so many ways loved it...😊🌹
Wolfman🐺
Wolfman🐺
16th Jan 2019 8:14pm
I gracious thank you, Priest, for sharing such thoughts of my song, which I wish you could hear how it plays in my head (I write lyrics, but I can’t write the music - only hear it).
And for the RL honor of place.
🐾Tiger
And for the RL honor of place.
🐾Tiger
Anonymous
- Edited 27th Dec 2019 12:45pm
16th Jan 2019 6:10pm
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16th Jan 2019 8:23pm
Celestial Sister, I’m honored to have you return, to grace my work with your words of instinct & insight.
And you are not mistaken. The lyrical twist in the tiger’s tail is just as you have perceived. Excellent!
A sister’s love,
ever
Jade Tiger 🐅
And you are not mistaken. The lyrical twist in the tiger’s tail is just as you have perceived. Excellent!
A sister’s love,
ever
Jade Tiger 🐅
17th Jan 2019 00:22am
I would love to hear an audio accompaniment. Meanwhile, I'll check out the uncut version. It may be even better than this fine work, Jadey. Ninja sends her love.
17th Jan 2019 2:57am
*picks up Ninja and nuzzles her black fur*
Aah, thank you so much, dearest friend... and to you, too, sweetie...
*sets Ninja back into Thomas’s lap*
I can’t believe all the rain lately... and so cold! Hope you’ve been feeling better, and I appreciate your always constant support. x
Jadey🐾
Aah, thank you so much, dearest friend... and to you, too, sweetie...
*sets Ninja back into Thomas’s lap*
I can’t believe all the rain lately... and so cold! Hope you’ve been feeling better, and I appreciate your always constant support. x
Jadey🐾
20th Jan 2019 6:06am
17th Jan 2019 3:15pm
Wow, what a wicked last stanza, great dark work! Jadey
Do you think I’ll change my mind,
Licking tongue, wipe clean the stains.
Pity you? Let me remind,
Owning you, your faith, in chains.
Do you think I’ll change my mind,
Licking tongue, wipe clean the stains.
Pity you? Let me remind,
Owning you, your faith, in chains.
20th Jan 2019 6:05am
