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Passé
(Did you forget how to use the muscle in your head?)
( a Quatern )
When formulaics are a crime it seems,
To you who dress as poets and pretend.
To feign & then go thru’ the act. That steams!
And then you blink, how dare I to offend.
You spout about you’d rather do freestyle,
When formulaics are a crime it seems.
That’s fine with me, and frankly, all the while
I polish my new trophy till it gleams.
I think it must distract, these lyric schemes.
How do you manage writing anything?
When formulaics are a crime it seems,
It must be painful as your thoughts unstring.
To one-trick ponies, everywhere, I say,
Whenever you awaken from your dreams:
Since when did rhyming schemes become passe’,
When formulaics are a crime it seems?
( a Quatern )
When formulaics are a crime it seems,
To you who dress as poets and pretend.
To feign & then go thru’ the act. That steams!
And then you blink, how dare I to offend.
You spout about you’d rather do freestyle,
When formulaics are a crime it seems.
That’s fine with me, and frankly, all the while
I polish my new trophy till it gleams.
I think it must distract, these lyric schemes.
How do you manage writing anything?
When formulaics are a crime it seems,
It must be painful as your thoughts unstring.
To one-trick ponies, everywhere, I say,
Whenever you awaken from your dreams:
Since when did rhyming schemes become passe’,
When formulaics are a crime it seems?
Published 25th Dec 2018
Author's Note
Written for & entered in the Deep competition “Pet Peeves”.
Thank you, Ely, for your support.
Thank you, Ely, for your support.
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26th Dec 2018 00:07am
I completely agree that rhyming has not become passé. It's just as valid as the other forms. Fine write, Jadey. Even Ninja approves.
LOL my most gracious & grateful thanks to you, dearest crowfly friend... and high praise when Ninja gives something I write a “paw’s up”!
And as I said in a reply to another’s comment:
‘ and sites where some of THEIR groups actually had notices to be boldly evident BEFORE you joined or submitted a piece: “NO RHYMING POETRY ACCEPTED”.’
Jadey 💌
And as I said in a reply to another’s comment:
‘ and sites where some of THEIR groups actually had notices to be boldly evident BEFORE you joined or submitted a piece: “NO RHYMING POETRY ACCEPTED”.’
Jadey 💌
26th Dec 2018 2:55am
26th Dec 2018 12:59pm
Why thank you so much, dear Poet, I’m grateful. I didn’t anticipate anyone who would think my piece as beautiful.
Jade✍🏻
Jade✍🏻
26th Dec 2018 6:03am
I really like this and although not your calibre, nor do I practice rhyme often, it's because I don't tend to pull it off oh so gracefully. I'm still very new to writing poetry as well. I find beauty in freestyle and not all rhymes are all too great either.;) However, I look at some of this "freestyle " and think wtf..just meaningless scrabble and everybody loves it. I give you kudos and may come to you on some advice on a few things as well!!
Oh my sister from another mister (I just made that up, cause we’re both Pandoras 😇)...
I wrote this expressly for the competition, however, it’s not directed at anyone specifically. It’s a rant that finally came to me from many years (from various sites) where formulaic verse was often actually shunned - like a poet who could do it was now a leper for others to disassociate with. People who didn’t bother to learn because they couldn’t so they didn’t even try. And sites where some of THEIR groups actually had notices to be boldly evident BEFORE you joined or submitted a piece: “NO RHYMING POETRY ACCEPTED”.
I never did a lot of that style for years because I had a lot to learn. I was known for Japanese short form poetry, and my free verse which reflected my knowledge of the former. None of it having anything to do with rhyme schemes. However, I really started getting into it, and learning by leaps & bounds, once I came HERE of all places, and joined DUP November 9, 2015. I learned as I started participating in the competitions, and when I soon met Hepcat61 (the “Sonnet Master” as he was called when he was added on as a Poet of the Week over on Facebook). We’ve since learned so much from each other.
So you see, my rant has nothing to do with poets like yourself, but instead, to those who claim to not need to read others, or edit the stuff they do write, because they either are lazy, and/or are full of an ego that thinks doing a structured poem with specific rules to observe, hobbles their “freedom” of expression. Let me just say for the record: that kind of thinking is bullshit.
And dear sister, my door is open whenever you feel the need in the name of ALL poetry. I hope I make sense cause it’s 4:50am my time at the moment.🤭
All my best,
Jadey🐾
I wrote this expressly for the competition, however, it’s not directed at anyone specifically. It’s a rant that finally came to me from many years (from various sites) where formulaic verse was often actually shunned - like a poet who could do it was now a leper for others to disassociate with. People who didn’t bother to learn because they couldn’t so they didn’t even try. And sites where some of THEIR groups actually had notices to be boldly evident BEFORE you joined or submitted a piece: “NO RHYMING POETRY ACCEPTED”.
I never did a lot of that style for years because I had a lot to learn. I was known for Japanese short form poetry, and my free verse which reflected my knowledge of the former. None of it having anything to do with rhyme schemes. However, I really started getting into it, and learning by leaps & bounds, once I came HERE of all places, and joined DUP November 9, 2015. I learned as I started participating in the competitions, and when I soon met Hepcat61 (the “Sonnet Master” as he was called when he was added on as a Poet of the Week over on Facebook). We’ve since learned so much from each other.
So you see, my rant has nothing to do with poets like yourself, but instead, to those who claim to not need to read others, or edit the stuff they do write, because they either are lazy, and/or are full of an ego that thinks doing a structured poem with specific rules to observe, hobbles their “freedom” of expression. Let me just say for the record: that kind of thinking is bullshit.
And dear sister, my door is open whenever you feel the need in the name of ALL poetry. I hope I make sense cause it’s 4:50am my time at the moment.🤭
All my best,
Jadey🐾
26th Dec 2018 3:47pm
Oh, I completely got what you were saying and took no offense personally. Sometimes I wonder what is poetry to some personally and I'm just somebody new to the world. Lol. Thanks, it is sonnets that are my main interest though so I'll catch up with you as I really want to master A LOT but for the life of me, do not understand. I'm going to go vote now btw.
26th Dec 2018 4:15pm
The irony is that you're most probably the only poet around here who could do free verse.
26th Dec 2018 4:39pm
You now look upon a humble poet, since that’s what I am in R/L. I enjoy writing freeverse; in fact I have one in the works I’ll most likely have ready before the day is out. It’s what I was known for long before I did a decent formulaic. I actually find it soothing, writing freeverse. But unlike many who think it means an easier way to create poetry, it still has its specifics as to how it’s done. To be a writer is a lifetime’s passion.
with respect & thanks for the honor,
Jade
with respect & thanks for the honor,
Jade
26th Dec 2018 5:30pm
Thanks for the reply.
" it still has its specifics as to how it’s done" ... it would be good to read an elaboration of the part I've quoted at some point.
" it still has its specifics as to how it’s done" ... it would be good to read an elaboration of the part I've quoted at some point.
27th Dec 2018 4:36am
27th Dec 2018 6:06am
Why thank you, sir, for stopping in for a read and expressing your thoughts.
And a warm welcome to the Deep, wishing you a fortunate New Year.
Jade✍🏻
And a warm welcome to the Deep, wishing you a fortunate New Year.
Jade✍🏻
