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Introspectic Waters
Here we go,
stream of consciousness,
a flow, a pattern, a tune played is thought,
to avoid the ego is a vanity of altruism,
accomplishment born to oneself in unrecognizability,
yet to be absorbed is a lonesome and cold state,
unflattering microscopics when the macroscopic dwindles,
levelled scales an unachievable dream,
for perfection is unachievable,
we lonely sailors all,
guiding this ship we call home,
listening for the voice of the ocean,
to guide us as we float.
Published 12th Dec 2018
| Edited 15th Dec 2018
Author's Note
It's more like the inner voice is in question. Inner voice dictated by ego, your definition of self, ego is your recognized self and I've heard selflessness is a state of enlightenment, but to be self actualized would mean you couldn't appreciate your self actualization because your self actualized. Next then the opposite. Self absorbed people often wind up scrutinizing themselves more than selfless because their spectrum of good and bad lies only within themselves. This leaves us with trying to find a middle ground. Balancing self love with the love of others. In it together, yet alone.The water theme is a metaphor for the passage of time/life as we all constantly try to figure out who we are and what our voice is. The ship your/our heads.
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12th Dec 2018 11:24am
" unflattering microscopics when the macroscopic dwindles, " <<----- so true
Enjoyed this reflective spill
Enjoyed this reflective spill
12th Dec 2018 1:10pm
Nothing dopey about this. Do we listen to our inner voice? What are you saying here? What is your message?
Could you slip in an authors note maybe to further explain these lines?
Could you slip in an authors note maybe to further explain these lines?
16th Dec 2018 10:15am
12th Dec 2018 9:51pm
Great flowing piece here enjoyed the stream👏👏
"levelled scales an unachievable dream,
for perfection is unachievable,
we lonely sailors all,
guiding this ship we call home,
listening for the voice of the ocean,
to guide us as we float. " wonderful ending here love it!
"levelled scales an unachievable dream,
for perfection is unachievable,
we lonely sailors all,
guiding this ship we call home,
listening for the voice of the ocean,
to guide us as we float. " wonderful ending here love it!
16th Dec 2018 2:27pm
"to avoid the ego is a vanity of altruism" This line feels like the key to the whole poem.
So in order to exercise goodwill & kindness, compassion etc, the ego needs to be in place for that to exist, in your opinion, right?
Thank you for adding the author's note. Not sure it helped me much though, may have overcomplicated matters. lol.
So in order to exercise goodwill & kindness, compassion etc, the ego needs to be in place for that to exist, in your opinion, right?
Thank you for adding the author's note. Not sure it helped me much though, may have overcomplicated matters. lol.
