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In the darkness of the Night
The stars were many.
She wore them in her eyes,
To be seen in the darkness.
A darkness that had no end.
Cold air chilled the living.
Death was out that night.
Like a breeze of fresh air.
She wore them in her eyes,
To be seen in the darkness.
A darkness that had no end.
Cold air chilled the living.
Death was out that night.
Like a breeze of fresh air.
Published 7th Dec 2018
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7th Dec 2018 8:08am
i love the Feel of this read.
Probably because I love the Dark and the night.
"The stars were many.
She wore them in her eyes, " <<<<---------- interesting thought - gonna keep my attention for a while. Thank You
Probably because I love the Dark and the night.
"The stars were many.
She wore them in her eyes, " <<<<---------- interesting thought - gonna keep my attention for a while. Thank You
7th Dec 2018 9:16am
The different number of syllables on each line had an interesting effect.
7th Dec 2018 1:03pm
Excellent writing enjoyed reading this 👏
I really love the opening lines
"The stars were many.
She wore them in her eyes,
To be seen in the darkness.
A darkness that had no end." Deep and beautifully written bravo👏👏
I really love the opening lines
"The stars were many.
She wore them in her eyes,
To be seen in the darkness.
A darkness that had no end." Deep and beautifully written bravo👏👏
7th Dec 2018 1:53pm
Nice feel with this write. It will be interesting to see your expansion on these themes of night and death in future poems. Really enjoyed it.
8th Dec 2018 9:58pm
I would not do it any other way, thank you for your great feedback. Honestly i really did not expect such a welcoming place. I will be writing more on those topics as they are of great inspiration to me.
7th Dec 2018 8:58pm
I feel so at home with all of you. May we all see the light in the darkness.
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- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
8th Dec 2018 6:06pm
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8th Dec 2018 9:47pm
You get me, it can mean something different depending on your perspective.
