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Oxygen & Philosophy

Sooner or later...but ultimately
we all pass away from a lack... of Oxygen

for our hearts what better work can there be
than making Oxygen available 24/7 to every single one
of the more than 37 trillion cells in the Human Body?

Written by Ely

(E.A.Rothwell)

Published 28th Nov 2018

#death #humankind #philosophical

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Re. Oxygen & Philosophy

Anonymous

28th Nov 2018 2:29pm

I think this a fine example of how formatting can help the flow of a poem. Formatting this into distinct lines and adding line breaks would really help the poignancy of each statement being made here.

That being said, I actually really like the message of the poem. The short, quirky nature of the poem is actually its beauty.

Thank you for sharing.

-M

Ely (E.A.Rothwell)

28th Nov 2018 8:25pm

Thanks, to you too, Missy... I get what you're saying... but I did not glean ''how'' you mean to do it... to it.
I am a Visual and proprioceptive learner, and need to see it first... then do the same, 'till it becomes ingrained in the brain.
Can you oblige with an example... that would make my day. Ta, Ely