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Steaming Pile
I try to loosen up
Dispense with all the rigors
The rhyme and syllable count are scarce
Embellishment in service to content
My Muse strokes me on the back
Almost quelling the stricture and structure
I ache for my former form
And try my best to let it go
But when she rewards me with a kiss
I relapse to my former style
I now write in a state of bliss
Even if it's a steaming pile.
Dispense with all the rigors
The rhyme and syllable count are scarce
Embellishment in service to content
My Muse strokes me on the back
Almost quelling the stricture and structure
I ache for my former form
And try my best to let it go
But when she rewards me with a kiss
I relapse to my former style
I now write in a state of bliss
Even if it's a steaming pile.
Published 25th Nov 2018
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Anonymous
25th Nov 2018 10:07pm
Trust me my friend. Your write are not "a steaming pile"! You breath, drink, eat and speak art. We'd need more like you. J
25th Nov 2018 10:13pm
I'm working on a free form style. Not easy. I see no problem with rhythm and rhyme, but there are those who eschew that kind of form. Just wish I could write like Ginsberg and others. I personally don't think that rhythm and rhyme are invalid, but I tend to abuse them. Go figure. Thank you J!
Anonymous
25th Nov 2018 10:33pm
My dear friend, if rhythm and ryhms are your style keep using them. As I say in my apologetics, we need not be bound by others as a rule, but we do have to be ourselves. So don't ever take anything, anyone says, as a cue to change who you are. You are you! That's when you are great. Hugs J
25th Nov 2018 10:25pm
dearest Sir Crow I think you should write as your muse leads
I try to keep rhyme or rhythm out of mine because I simply can't keep a beat lol
but try as I might a natural internal rhythm is present off beat and all...
excellent write...
love Brenda 💕
I try to keep rhyme or rhythm out of mine because I simply can't keep a beat lol
but try as I might a natural internal rhythm is present off beat and all...
excellent write...
love Brenda 💕
26th Nov 2018 1:00am
You have enough talent to dispense with the artifice of rhythm and rhyme. It's your passion that shines through. Thank you Brenda!
25th Nov 2018 10:31pm
I get it. Free verse is a vex to me! As much as I admire Eliot, I can’t seem to resonate unless there be meter and rhyme.
26th Nov 2018 1:01am
I'm usually at a complete loss when it comes to free verse too. Thank you Reggie, and for the RL entry!
26th Nov 2018 1:11am
Just let it loose and allow it to flow from your soul, you are producing way more than a mere pile! I can resonate though, I have a hard time returning to simplistic prose (forgive me as I don't know writing or it's terminology). I also can't seem to grasp a particular style so I go with whatever comes.
26th Nov 2018 11:19pm
My advice, for what it's worth: Just let it flow and you'll be fine. Thank you PandoraUnleashed!
26th Nov 2018 4:11pm
Bravo Sir Crow! The magic of a singular kiss. And a steaming pile your work is not. Hence forth you can banish that thought.
26th Nov 2018 11:21pm
27th Nov 2018 9:27am
You are your own writer and create your own form and style, it makes your work more natural than trying to force a concept into a strict structure.
