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The Whore Next Door
She tells me she knows the score
The desires of my wretched soul
But she's my neighbor, and a whore
No stopping her, she's on a roll
Seems she has all the needed nerve
To think that my loose sense has sunk
She seems to think she speaks with verve
When all she really says is bunk
So I tell her to take a hike
Leave me all sweet hell alone
But I explain that I might like
To dissect her to the bone
She mumbles fast and then retreats
A tart dragging her vicious cur
And it just takes a few heartbeats
Before she starts another stir.
The desires of my wretched soul
But she's my neighbor, and a whore
No stopping her, she's on a roll
Seems she has all the needed nerve
To think that my loose sense has sunk
She seems to think she speaks with verve
When all she really says is bunk
So I tell her to take a hike
Leave me all sweet hell alone
But I explain that I might like
To dissect her to the bone
She mumbles fast and then retreats
A tart dragging her vicious cur
And it just takes a few heartbeats
Before she starts another stir.
Author's Note
I have nothing against prostitutes in general, just one in particular.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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Re. The Whore Next Door
27th Oct 2018 8:19pm
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Thank you LilDragonFly. I tried not to come off as an angry crank writing some hothead lines. I'm a softie at heart.
Re. The Whore Next Door
27th Oct 2018 8:38pm
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27th Oct 2018 8:50pm
I counted the syllables to each line. Makes it kind of fun sometimes, a game, in a way. I'm glad this one flows for you. Thanks JusTim!
Re. The Whore Next Door
Anonymous
27th Oct 2018 8:47pm
When you hit them, my friend, you hit them hard. Good on you. J.
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27th Oct 2018 8:52pm
I hope this didn't come across as too harsh, but this "tart" has it coming. I just try to keep my distance...
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Anonymous
27th Oct 2018 10:25pm
No worries. A bitch is a bitch. Nothing to do with gender or prostitutes, which I respect and cherish, if they do it freely and happily. Certain people need to be told. Remember, it's never enough when a being has it coming! I agree with you 1000%. J
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Re. The Whore Next Door
27th Oct 2018 9:20pm
Got some nice rhythm and rhyme going here, Crowfly; neat.
Nice take on the subject matter, too.
Nice take on the subject matter, too.
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27th Oct 2018 9:49pm
Thank you Josh. I'm no expert on the subject matter, but I try to keep my eyes open...
Re. The Whore Next Door
Anonymous
27th Oct 2018 11:12pm
Never met a prostitute in my life. Very well written, Sir Crow.
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28th Oct 2018 7:10pm
Re. The Whore Next Door
28th Oct 2018 3:09am
Hey Crow.......I hardly know any of my neighbors.......probably good thing....LOL! Enjoyed this.......eloquent talent.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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28th Oct 2018 7:11pm
Re. The Whore Next Door
28th Oct 2018 1:25pm
I like this write Crow, not harsh at all. Have met my share of working ladies from low rent to high class, they can definitely be bitches.
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28th Oct 2018 7:13pm
Very true. The "whore with a heart of gold" may be a myth, at least in my experience. Thank you Bonzi!
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28th Oct 2018 7:56pm